NOTE: six chapters

(10/10) Title: An absolutely direct title. It makes total sense and is a nice and brief description of the story.

(7/10) Character: The characters are fun in their own ways. There wasn't much said about the characters before hand, but when it was reveled that Sunggyu was very depressed and quiet while keeping to himself after his blindness, I was suprised that he could talk to her so openly than most others would towards a stranger. I loved Woohyun's character, though I was suprised how cheerful and playful he was as a lawyer.  

(5/10) Originality: I'm sure you knew it had a cliche story line. Although everyone likes cliche stuff. It was not a very fresh idea or new thought.

(38/40) Storyline/Plot: A good plot and storyline. I thought the meeting was just a little to fast, along with being so fond and comfortable with one another. It reminds me of a happily ever after story at the beginning. Wow, did it get scary in the last chapter. It was a good twist of intensity. The plot was very smooth and was planned out well. 

(5/25) Grammar/Errors: At first, I thought there may have been a lot of typos, but then I realized the mistakes repeating over. I'd like to help point out a few major errors. First of all, in chapter 1 it says, "The bus driver waited until Sunggyu to be sits before he drove back. When Sunggyu walked to the sit, he felt someone was watching at him. He smiled to whoever person that watching him before had his sit." Some of the words, "sit" should have been replaced by the word "seat" or "sat" to make logical sense. The sentence should have been somewhat more similar to this, "The bus driver waited until Sunggyu was seated before he drove again. When Sunggyu walked to the seat, he felt someone was watching him. He smiled at whoever was watching him, before he sat down in his seat." While I read, I realized that some of the time, you switch the two words, "to" and "at" from where they actually belong. You would say "He smiled to her -" when it should be, "He smiled at her-". Including the other way around. I also noticed that you often don't use commas, periods, or apostrophes in your sentences, even though they are significant. Use the word "the" occasionally, it is a definite article prior to introducing nouns. So please use it before a noun, it is what makes a sentence less awkward. When writing, you should know that it is best to not repeat the same words in a short amount of time. I think what you are best at is writing dialogue. " 'Thank you then` Sunggyu cut her talks by thanked her", I found this as one of the most awkward sentences, also including that you had no period afterwards. Just looking at this sentence, I assumed you had a brain spaz like me when I can't think of the right word. What I meant was, you said, "cut off her talks", when you actually meant "interrupted her". You have a lot of trouble with past and present tense. I'm not sure what you meant by "guise" but I'm thinking you meant "guys". I searched up guise, and I got, 

noun

1. an external form, appearance, or manner of presentation, typically concealing the true nature of something

    

I advise that you re-read your sentences often, it is a great method that'll help you improve in writing.

(3/5) Overall Enjoyment: It was good. A nice drama story. I liked the ideas to the story and it flowed nicely. 

(68/100) Points Total

Bonus: A cliche but cute plot, and grammar needs work. I'd be happy to help with grammar if you need it and ask for it.

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