NOTE: One chapter - one-shot

(6/10) Title: It was too long, so long that I had to change the original font size of the headline above. I would either take the Always out and just have Expect The Unexpected. Or something like Unexpected Expectations. 

(3/10) Character: I let a few points off from the two characters. There wasn't any character background details. Minhyuk appears at her door steps, they watch a horror movie, play games, and bam love session. 

What I did pick up was that Minhyuk is an attention during video games, the female character screams a lot and has a Facebook. In the end Minhyuk confesses. 

(7/10) Originality: Back when I read everything on AFF, I found these stories a lot. Where the plot was a friend comes over, things happen and they end up together. I think it's great that your wrote this story for your friend, but I think it'd be greater if you wrote a one-shot that had a different plot and that'll litteraly blow your friend away. Like, whoosh.  

(23/40) Storyline/Plot: You jumped into the scene were Minhyuk showed up. In the beginning it sounded like she(the character) expected Minhyuk to come over because of how she welcomed him in. If they did schedule some fun time with each other than you should've had a scene where they planned everything out. Another one-shot that I had just reviewed had the same problems. 

A backstory is what I want to get the feel of everything. I cannot comment on the flow because it's a one-shot, but if I had to I'd say that you skipped a lot of things just to get to the end. I wanted to hear more dialogue. 

(13/25) Grammar/Errors: Since English is your first language I graded rougher than a person that has English as their second language. 

I told another author this and I'm not afraid to tell you, I don't really like stories that fuse Korean language into randomly, so that deducted some errors points. This is an English website, if you wanted to have Korean in it then write the whole thing in Korean. I've also included a correction side and a suggestion one, and all of this is in chronlogical order. 

For oppa you could've given Minhyuk a nickname. Something like Hyuk or to joke around say Hyukmin. 

I can't exactly point out each individual error you had because there were quite a lot, but they were all the same ones. When you end a sentence with a dialogue there needs to be a comma. 

Ex; Original: Half way through the movie you suddenly laugh "why are you laughing? this isn't comedy, pabo!"

Correction: Halfway through the movie you suddenly laugh, "Why are you laughing? This isn't a comedy, pabo!" 

Suggestion: Halfway through the movie you suddenly laugh, "Why are you laughing? This isn't a comedy, you dummy!"

Note: Capitalize the beginning of your sentences and remember the commas. 

Original: "annyeong Minhyuk oppa!" you greet him excitedly as you let him inside your apartment.

Correction: "Annyeong Minhyuk oppa!" You greet him excitedly as you let him inside your apartment.

Suggestion: "Hey Minhyuk!" You greet him excitedly as you let him inside your apartment. 

Note: If I've made a mistake myself or you think the correction isn't needed or right, comment down below so I can fix it or explain it to you. 

(3/5) Overall Enjoyment: Is this BtoB's Minhyuk? Hurhur, I like athetic guys so he's my bias. It's kind of a cheatsheet to give me a biased story, so you surely picked the right reviewer! I'm not into much face-to-face interaction so the ending made me somewhat uncomfortable .. 

(55/100) Points Total However cheatsheets are only for my enjoyment, they won't boast or lower your grade at all. 

Bonus: Your questions and focuses for us:

Errors: Work on your commas and capitalization. The rest are found under grammar/errors. 

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