Broken Wings

Title (3/5)

There are a lot of stories on the website with the title ‘Broken Wings’. However, it does fit
well with your story because Myungoo’s wings got injured and that’s when Sungyeol found
out.

Poster/Background/Trailer (7/10)

The poster was good, not great, but could do better. There’s a little too much going on
in the center of the poster. But I like that you used the color blue instead of red. A lot of
people who write dark stories that involve demons use red.

Description & Foreword (8/10)

The description was worded very nicely. It was interesting and gave a bit of background
information. However, it wasn’t completely eye-catching. You just told us that Myungsoo
was an abomination, an outcast for being different from the other demons. Give us a little
insight on what’s about to happen.

Plot (10/10)

Oh my gosh, I can’t even…just…WOW. That was really amazing. The plot was so good I
could feel my heart racing at so many parts.

Originality (6/10)

Demons are over used and it’s completely cliché to have them fall in love with a human.
However, your story was written so much better than other’s and it was a nice change to
see real emotions described in it.

Flow (5/5)

Perfect.

Everything was so organized and in place, it was easy to read. You didn’t have things all
over the place and you easily streamed emotion, description, and feelings together.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (30/30)

English is not your first language?

I do not believe that, because I could not find a single mistake. Every single word was
spelled correctly and in the right tense. The punctuation was absolutely perfect and what’s
even better, you know how to use ellipses! You have vocabulary down pat, using intelligent
words that fit so well with your story. Even your dialogue was perfect!

Just for the grammar, your study made it so worth reading!

Writing Style (10/10)

I would give you 100/10! You write so beautifully, it was as if I were reading it out of a
published book! It’s so rare to come across a story written so amazingly! Your description
of the town and where the demons lived was so good I could picture it in my mind. The
feelings and thoughts of Myungsoo made him feel very real, instead of just a demon
character.

It was as if I were watching this play as a movie in my head while reading and I absolutely
love stories that make me do that!

Overall Enjoyment (10/10)

I absolutely loved this. Can’t say anything more. Just, wow.

Total Score: 89/100%

congratulations! Your story will be in the recommended list!

reviewed by: peacelovehugs