The Power of Kindness

a. Title (4/5)

I like your title, it simples and fits the plot of your story. However, it's not really catchy but the good thing is, it doesn't sound cliché for me.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (8/10)

The poster is cute and simple ,the background with its color pink doesn't hurt my eye because of the poster you made for yourself. It's just that the OC's picture is not well balanced.

c. Description & Foreword (5/10)

Such a short description and for the foreword, you gave one short teaser and I think it is cute. I like it because this one-shot is an inspired one.

d. Plot (8/10)

I like your cute plot. Although it's short, it's kind of sweet and teaches a good lesson. It's a cool and heart-warming story for me but it's not very attractive.

e. Originality (8/10)

I'm not so sure if this is really original, but its one short inspiration that you wrote and I like it. It only lacks a little bit of creativity. There's no love story but I like it because I've learned here that it's better to give than to receive. It's like a children's story which makes it cute.

f. Flow (5/5)

Perfect score here since this is a short one shot. It's not rushed and not slow, I like its pace.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (21/30)

Just a few mistakes and I will correct them for you.

wrong: then he loss his nerves.

it should be: and then he loses his nerves

To make it clear, loses and loss have a different meaning. You can search for it.

Another thing is, don't end with two periods when ending a saying. It should be three periods or maybe a coma.

wrong: He went inside the room and find out that the patient still sleeping.

Since you used the word "went" , then removed the word find and make it "found". Also add "was" after the word "patient".

wrong: "Why do she seemed familiar?"

Hmm, it should be "seem". Must be the base form, example, instead of using be, you should use "been".

wrong: "She's the one who gaved me milk!"

"She's the one who gave me the milk!" you shouldn't add "d" after gave because gave is already the past tense.

and also, I don't think it's necessary to use "But" as the first word.

That is all. Your words, grammars and etc. are simple and easy to understand. I didn't find several since it's only a one-shot.

h. Writing Style (9/10)

I just like your simple writing style although your English is not very good.

i. Overall Enjoyment (7/10) - 

Since it's an L. Joe fic, and L. Joe is one of my biases so yeah, I enjoyed the short story of yours.

Total: 75/100%