calling Harukai-Kun
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Title (5/5)
Your title gives off the mystery, horror-ish kind of feeling, and I absolutely love it. These are the kinds of fics that I love to read, and your title was short and simple, making me love it even more.
Poster & Background & Trailer (9/10)
Well, the background matched the theme of the story, but I think it would look much more appealing if you had an actual poster. Other than that, it matched perfectly so there was no problems with that.
Description & Foreword (10/10)
Stunning, really. Your one of the few writers that can successfuly capture my attention, because you caught my attention with your foreword all right. You added just enough detail to intrigue the reader, with just enough mystery to make me wonder what happened. It was a very well worded description & foreword, I couldn't ask for anything better.
Plot (10/10)
I absolutely loved the plot, how it all flowed so well together, with the little hints of mystery and supernatural. Also, since I love horror, mystery and supernatural fics, I was hoping yours wasn't something confusing or cliched. But your plot was better than I expected, full marks for that.
Originality (10/10)
Your plot was not cliched at all. It just had something unique about it, something that sets it apart from other fics.
Flow (5/5)
Everything flowed nicely, it didn't move too fast nor too slow.
Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)
Well, I only found one minor mistake throughout this whole fic, and it's in the foreword.
"JongHyun was smiling and, as onew looked over briefly to ask something ..."
You don't put the comment after the and. It's supposed to be,
"JongHyun was smiling and as onew looked over briefly to ask something, he had forgotten ..."
Your vocabulary was great, you used very descriptive words that made me have a picture in my mind of what was going on.
Writing Style (10/10)
Your writing style was neat and organized, and you didn't use flashy colours either, which I liked.
Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
I absolutely loved this fic, no doubt. It had a little bit of humor in it, with a bit of horror and a lot of mystery and supernatural stuff. You have great potential as a writer, and honestly this is one of the highest marks I've given before.
Total - 98/100%
reviewed by: -dinoraawr
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