Love behind the scenes

Title (1/5)

I don’t exactly understand the title—it seems random and it doesn’t give me a sense of what your story is about. To me, “Love Behind the Scenes” sounds more like a love scandal rather than a male maid who works for EXO.

Also, you need to correct the title to this: “Love Behind the Scenes” rather than leaving it lowercased.

Poster & Background & Trailer (4/10)

The poster—I can’t sense the presence of your story in this poster. Sure it’s nicely done and all but I don’t understand it. A poster is supposed to give your readers a feeling of what your story is about—is this a comedic story? An angst-y story? I want to be able to see your story in the poster not just cut-outs of your characters. And I know it’s not your fault (not saying it’s the graphic designer’s fault either) but maybe next time, you should explain to the designer what feeling you want rather than just the said person making a poster with pictures of the idols.

The background is fine.

Description & Foreword (10/10)

Both were perfect—no complaint here!

Plot (5/10)

The plot is pretty generic—rather it be a female or male OC. Jae Min is a maid for EXO and he later falls for a member, and a member falls for him too. But I do like the fact that you wrote your scenario into the story rather than having it be like any other ones—I like the drama in this story.

Originality (10/10)

Definitely an original—I like the fact that you’re using a male OC rather than using a member of EXO because that’s what I normally would see.

Flow (5/5)

The flow is perfect!

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (30/30)

There were no errors or mistakes—well at least I couldn’t find any.

Writing Style (4/10)

Okay, I like your writing style, I just strongly dislike it that you decided to do the whole script-writing shenanigan when writing your dialogue. It threw me off and I just really do not like it. Please write in writing format and not script-writing; you’re not writing a movie, are you? If not, erase the script writing and actually write their emotions when speaking not do what you’re doing.

Overall Enjoyment (4/10)

I’m not a fan of EXO but I enjoyed this story to some extent I just couldn’t enjoy it as much because of the way you decided to write the dialogue. It’s ridiculous—especially when I find your writing to be intriguing.

Total – 73/100

Reviewer: vangbby