The First Snow

a. Title (3/5)
-Hurm... I don't know what to say about your title, it sounds nice... and just the moment I read your title, it made me feel warm... That's because it's snow time in your story! But it didn't really catch my attention, or gave me an urge to read it right away. But it's a touching title, I guess.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (8/10)
-Your poster is too dark, but your story is not really dark... It's sad (part dark, LOL) but it's light. Yet again, I think your poster is amazing; the pictures are a perfect fit for the genre.

c. Description & Foreword (10/10)
-Great! Very interesting! What a short description, I really wanted to read already but I had to read the foreword first. I didn't understand what was going on with the foreword at first, but sooner, I realized what's happening when I read the first (final) chapter. I love it!

d. Plot (10/10)
-Amazing plot! It made me feel cold, gave me Goosebumps and surprised me with 'Jeongmin's hand went through the cup’! So... That was it; I never realized that when he said he's just Hyunseong's illusion, because he is already dead. I love how you made it so sad, a little realistic and sweet.

e. Originality (8/10)
- I think it's creative but not much, I think. It's common, the way Jeongmin died and Hyunseong missing him so badly and when the first snow had come once again, he was thinking about him and thought he was really there, I was even tricked myself. And when Hyunseong decided to die too and so he'll meet Jeongmin, that was common, I think I've heard, read or watched it somewhere. But I really didn't expect the main details... So I love it! It wasn't as predictable as I think, it was great!

f. Flow (4/5)
- I love the flow. It's was soft moving and the flashbacks was great, it wasn't really boring but it was a bit thrilling!

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (20/30)
- I deducted this part big because you always type "..." something like that. You should express a person's silence not with just "...", you should make a sentence or whatever. There were a couple of mistakes, I don't remember everything because I read your fic while I was in the school's library earlier. Some words were also repetitive but just watch out with your punctuations, especially "..." or "...(word or sentence...". You shouldn't start a sentence or dialogue like that. Just describe it in words not with dots, period.

h. Writing Style (9/10)
 - It's nice, so warm and touching and dramatic, the way you wrote it but the writing style with some repetitive words should be lessened. But you're great.

i. Overall Enjoyment (8/10)
- I can't imagine Hyunseong and Jeongmin, but yeah, I tried! They look cute, and I enjoyed it especially because it was so sad and dramatic. Something suspenseful with me, I may be a dumb not realizing Jeongmin died in the first place. LOL. But I enjoyed your fic! Although, some parts were disappointing -_-

Total: 80/100%

reviewed by: sususco123