Love at Gunpoint

Title (3/5)

The title is okay, but I think you could have come up with something more…enticing.

Poster/Background/Trailer (/10)

Description & Foreword (5/10)

The description is well written, something that I would expect to see on a book cover, but not something
that belongs on this site, but I’ll get to that later. If you don’t use the idol’s names then you probably
aren’t going to attract many people.

Plot (5/10)

The plot was okay, but this type of story doesn’t belong here. I think you should go to a different site such
as fictionpress. This is not an Asian story with idols, you just want people to imagine the characters are
idols so they read it. So really, it’s not something most people here are going to want to read, even if you
switch the names from English ones to the idol’s.

Originality (10/10)

Haven’t seen anything like it before.

Flow (4/5)

Flow was good, but switching chapters is a little confusing.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (28/30)

Found one or two mistakes.

Writing Style (10/10)

You definitely have style, it’s written very lovely. I’m not trying to offend you, but I really think this type
of story belongs somewhere else where it could attract more attention.

Overall Enjoyment (4/10)

It was okay, but not something I’d want to read. Definitely continue writing, just keep in mind that this is
asianfanfics and not englishfanfics.

Total Score: 69/90%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs