Not Your Average Sibling Rivalry

a. Title (5/5)

I love it. It sounds so cute and doesn't really sound cliche much.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (9/10)

It's cute, awesome poster as well as the background you used.

c. Description & Foreword (8/10)

You have a very interesting description, it just leaves me wondering and so full of secrets this Yunhee girl. You didn't reveal much and that's a good thing, just keep it up.

d. Plot (7/10)

I like the plot, it's secrecy and interesting. The sibling-rivalry, that's what I was expecting to read but when I read the chapters there wasn't really much sibling rivalry. Seungho looks like he cares for Yunhee, and there's always funny scenes with Yunhee and the other members. Seungho and her doesn't look like rivals for me. Just in my opinion. But I don't really understand it, maybe you're going to slow to your story. I don't understand Yunhee, why she's not going to a school and about the trainee thing? I want to know the incident but you haven't showed it yet so I guess, you're going to keep me waiting about her secrets. Still, I like the plot, it's cute, funny, a little bit suspenseful because of Yunhee's past or secret about trainee and school thing. Very interesting. I just can't wait about the sibling rivalry to begin.

e. Originality (6/10)

I'm not sure if this is original but I'm a fan of your story, I like it. I like it that there's sibling rivalry, but with a over-protective brother like Seungho. I like the suspence going on, Yunhee's hidden truth about her school and being a trainee. It makes me want to ask a lot of questions, like she's a drop out? or what was the incident? I don't even know it yet and I can't wait, impatience is attacking me again. But it's really interesting but sometimes a little boring because there's too much funny scenes. I'm not sure if people have read this kind of stories, but this is my first time to read something about sibling rivalry.

f. Flow (2/5)

The flow is fine, it wasn't really fast but I think the comedy and funny scenes were just too much for 9 chapters and they were usually short. Sometimes, I think it's slow because there was too much funny scenes which made Yunhee's hidden truths slow.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (24/30)

There were a couple of errors. Like capitalizations, you always write the word "I" in a small letter but it should be capitalize. Your grammar and spellings are okay, but not perfect.

h. Writing Style (9/10)

I like it, very descriptive .It was easy to understand but the not so much details and it was a bit confusing at some part (maybe it was chapter 8?) , so I deducted 1.

i. Overall Enjoyment (8/10) -

Thanks to the funny scenes, I really enjoyed it. But unfortunately, I got hooked. Yunhee arrived to her location and she started serving? I got hooked because Jaewoon just froze, maybe Yunhee saw him? Errm, sorry, I'm just imagining right now. This happens to me because your story was a cliffhanger. But still, I enjoyed it. I actually laughed a lot while reading this, and it made my heart raced because I was eager to know the truth about Yunhee.

Total Score: 78/100%