The Dark Chocolate Escape

a. Title (5/5)
This was a very interesting title. I love how you use Chocolate as a metaphor in your description so that it relates to the title, and now that I mentioned it. You are right. Dark Chocolate, when you first take a bite, all you taste is Sweetness and then as you feel the chocolate melt in your warm mouth, you realize too late how bitter it can really be.
(I didn't copy the exact words, but it was close.)

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (9/10)
Everything else is perfect but the quote in the poster. The Font could have been bigger. If it was, this would've been a perfect 10.

c. Description & Foreword (10/10)
There is no flaws. You know the meaning of Description and Foreword. Keep it up.

d. Plot (10/10)
No words can describe the perfectness in this plot.

e. Originality (10/10)
Honestly I think this was an awesome story. Although I've read a lot of 'Girl must be perfect at all times, no flaws' stories, i enjoyed this the most.

f. Flow (5/5)
It was not slow. Yet wasn't fast. It was at the most perfect pace there can be.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (30/30)
Flawless. Mistakes did not exist in this story. Everything that was needed, you included. 

h. Writing Style (10/10)
I loved the way you described the Characters emotion. The way you wrote the action scenes and the pain she was going through. There is nothing more perfect than your writing style. 

i. Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
Honestly I forgot that I was reviewing this story. I usually don't subscribe to the person needing my review, but I really want to know what happens next, so congratulations on getting a new subscriber! 


Total - 99/100
reviewer: phagirl
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