I am yours and you're mine

Title (2/5)
I give this a 2/5 because it has been used so many times before. In this case it kind of confuses me. Is
say this because all you talk about has really nothing to do with the title. The title is a little straight-
forward making the reader feel like they already know what to expect in the story. The title gives
to much information. If you don’t read anything but the title and couple you can predict that Suzy
doesn’t want anyone with TaeMin and TaeMin doesn’t want anyone with Suzy.

Poster/Backround/Trailer (8/10)
I absolutely love the poster. It kind of goes great with the mood of the story. The color is a little
off because they do have happy times which are not shown in the poster. The poster is gray which I
find very intresting because it shows the struggle and gloom they go through. I would wish that the
backround was a different because it feels as if the story is going to stay at an angry and sad vibe
forever.

Description & Foreword (1/10)
The description confused me a lot. I didn’t get anything that has to do with the story mainly. I say this
because who ever is speaking is only saying how they want to see you smile. It doesn’t tell what the
story is to be like in the future. Whenever you write a description you want to give brief insite on the
story. In the foreword you have a chance to tell what the story is about but you only talk about how
TaeZy is your favorite couple. The description nor foreword has anything to do with what the story is
about it only shows rage and how TaeZy is the main pairing.

Plot (9/10)
I like the plot a lot. I say this because I see where you are trying to get at. I do like the acts of jealousy
but I rather you show through actions rather than telling how jealous Suzy gets. Other than that the
plot is not unique but it is expressed rather well and clean.

Originality (1/10)
The story is not orginal. There are many stories with the same plot and feel. To make it a bit more
orignal add more action or a different type of act of jealousy or how the boy gets in trouble. Not to be
harsh but this story is a story that I have seen a million times ago.

Flow (3/5)
The flow was good but not that good. It felt a little rushed and underthought. It puzzeled how you go
from a chapter when SuZy is happy to when she was in an orphanage with TaeMin to being abusive.
You could add more detail and make the night longer because when she stops for no reason made me
wonder if you had anything else to make it longer but it is okay because I think every writer does that
at least once.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (20/30)
For english not being your first langauge in the story it is pretty good. So I decided to grade you as if
it is. Everything was great but when you would forget things. So it would make it feel as if you didn’t
gt to finish half of your sentences or you didn’t know what to put so I had to take 10 points off. The
grammar was off a bit but English is not your first langauge and you tried.

Writing Style (10/10)
I do not really like your writing style but I am very familiar with it. I like how incorparate it in the
story. Although I had trouble with when Suzy would talk once and you explain her expression and

then make a new line so she can talk again I thought it was TaeMin talking. For instance: "I told
the cab driver to take me to the house of Choi's family, although I did not know the
address, but the cab driver that helped me, he took me to all the houses of Choi's
family that there are In Seoul. Without shame, I asked if my husband named Lee
Taemin work in their house or not. It’s extremely tiring." She explained in an angrily
tone.

"I worried about you because normally you never come home late." She added.

If you would not have explained it I wouldn’t be able to figure it out fully. I am not taking points

because it what you are used to maybe.

Overall Enjoyment (2/10)
I didn’t really enjoy it. I loved the abuse scene but it was kind of pointless. The story was good but not
up to parr with what I have encountered. All I can say is that the characters do not usally act like that
in real life. I understand that it is a story but do research so you know your idol better. The better you
know the idol and how they act with their surrondings it makes the story more realistic.

Total Score: 56/100%

Reviewed by: ParkGi

Reviewer’s notes: Sorry if I was too harsh but I was being honest.