When the Camera Stops Rolling

Title (4/5)

The title was okay and it fit the story. But when I saw it I was expecting them to like always be on camera
and faking their relationship and it wasn’t like that. Except it really was the relationship without a camera.
But the title wasn’t exactly eye-catching and I’m almost positive that I’ve seen it before.

Poster/Trailer/Background (10/10)

Your poster was absolutely amazing! I love that the title of the story is not dead center, but off to the side
and at an angle. It makes people have to look and actually see the poster. The colors are good and calm,
not too bright or too dull. There’s not too much commotion going on in the poster either. A lot of people
put way to many colors, textures, designs, people, and words in the poster and it just gets too much. But I
really enjoyed the girl in the center with the film flowing around her.

Description/Foreword (2/10)

The description was a bit confusing and I didn’t understand what I was about to read. You have to be a
little clearer and give the readers some explanation about the story. Give them something that’s going to
grab their attention in. Same goes with the foreword.

Plot (6/10)

The plot was good but kind of boring. So Kikwang and Hyosung are in a fake relationship and they
actually don’t even like each other at all. In fact, they each have someone else they have certain affections
for. It was good to read, but it didn’t seem that it was going anywhere.

Originality (5/10)

It’s kind of used a lot when two idols are forced into a fake relationship but they like someone else or
have a boy/girlfriend already. Mix in jealously and new emotions and you’ll find a bunch of stories just
like it.

Now, I’m going to guess the ending.

Kikwang and Hyosung end up together.

Am I right?

Flow (5/5)

I thought everything flowed smoothly. You don’t rush things and keep it at a good pace. You write about
Kikwang and Hyosung always arguing throughout their relationship but at the same time mix in stuff
about Min, Hyuna, and Joon. Awesome.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (15/30)

There were a bunch of mistakes but I’m not going to go through the entire story and find them. The story
is good for the most part, but it definitely needs to be edited.

Writing Style (7/10)

You have a good writing style? Not to be rude, but it’s not like OMG-this-is-freaking-amazing-like-
a-book style but the kind of like playful style that I like reading every now and then. Everything was
organized and you had good paragraphs and single sentences that told the story very well.

Overall Enjoyment (9/10)

I liked the story a lot and I didn’t have to force myself to read each chapter.

Total Score: 63/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs