The Last Time I'm Wasted On You

Title (3/5)

The title was pretty intense. I actually really liked the title; however, I don’t think it matches your story very well. To me, it sounds like a story in which someone would fall in love with the other while drunk and yada. But when you actually read the description, you specifically state that it’s not . I had conflicted feels during this story because the title sounded so drunkenly romantic.

Poster/Trailer/Background (7/10)

I really like the poster. It’s dark and the picture of Kyuhyun really shows off his addiction; however, I think he looks a bit too smug. Leeteuk’s picture was perfect! He looks worried and suspicious. Awesome. I wish that you had a background with this because to see such a deep, dark poster and then a white background throws me off.

Description/Foreword (8/10)

The summary for your story was good. It gives a little overview of why Kyuhyun is like this, but I wish you’d have put a sort of prologue in the foreword. It would’ve dragged me in more than the small summary. It’s pretty random to be in such a deep mode, explaining Kyuhyun’s thoughts, and then all of a sudden going to an A/N without more insight on the story itself.

Plot (10/10)

I thought this was a pretty cool story. It’s definitely something I’ve never seen before. The plot was gradual and built up bit by bit. With drug stories, that’s an amazing quality. I thought this was definitely a well thought out story and that you put a lot of time and effort into it. It’s realistic and all, totally mind blowing.

Originality (10/10)

It’s a totally unique story. I’ve never seen a story in the setting of the 2007 car crash and going through the problems Kyuhyun had in an alternate history. It’s really cool. I love it!

Flow (5/5)

With drug stories, one should build up the suspense and when reality crashes on the victim of drugs, it comes in a rush. This is how it should be and is in real life. You did a great job with the flow. It was gradual at first and suddenly everything was askew. It was amazing.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (28/30)

Your vocabulary, spelling, punctuation, and grammar were amazing! I love you for having such amazing English. There were a couple mistakes, but I can’t find them again. Your mistakes aren’t prominent at all, so for that, your English is superb.

Writing Style (9/10)

Your writing style isn’t one that I like too much. There’s nothing wrong with it, but the way you write, you split up the paragraphs so much so it’s more like everything is one or two lines, and then you put it in another paragraph, which bothers me. Otherwise, your writing skills are really amazing! You portray Kyuhyun and Leeteuk brilliantly in this story.

Overall Enjoyment (9/10)

It was such an amazing story. The way you brought Kyuhyun through all his hardships was pretty cool. I was blown away by this story, and your English and writing skills are magnificent! The only reason why I took a point off of this section is because I, personally, couldn’t read it continuously. After a while, I’d get sidetracked. It’s nothing against you, but I just couldn’t focus on the story sometimes because it didn’t catch my full attention.

Total Score: 89/100%

Congratz ! Your story will be on the recommended list!

reviewed by: Star_Sarang