Breathless

Title (3/5)

While the title did pertain to the story, I think you should have done something more mysterious and sea-
like than just ‘Breathless’. It a commonly used word in a title and people often over look stories with
titles that they’ve seen around.

Poster/Background/Trailer (0/10)

I don’t like the poster at all. It was something you made yourself but it was very poorly made. While
reading the story I was imagining this really awesome looking poster that could have been made for it. I
think you should request someone to make you one, it would make your story look a lot cooler.

Description & Foreword (5/10)

The description really didn’t make me interested and you wrote too much. I think you should have just
put the weird legend about Daehyun and left it at that.

Plot (10/10)

Good plot, that’s all I can say.

Originality (10/10)

I have never read a story like this. It’s completely original and I doubt there’s another story like this one
the site.

Flow (5/5)

Amazing!

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)

Everything was so perfect! I couldn’t find (not that I was really looking or anything) any mistakes at
all. Well, there were a few comma mistakes where you put too much in a sentence, but other than that
everything was great!

Writing Style (10/10)

AMAZING! You have such an amazing style of writing! Description and details are absolutely perfect,
the emotion is written in very well, and I can picture everything going on in my mind as if I was watching
a movie.

Overall Enjoyment (7/10)

I did like it, but sea stories aren’t exactly my favorite thing to read, especially when I don’t even know
who these guys even are.

Total Score: 79/100%

Your story will be in the recommended list since the reviewer thinks it's a really good story! Congratz!

reviewed by: peacelovehugs