Finally

Title (1/5)
I don't like the title because there are so many titles similar to this out there. Cliché title, and not attractive at all. From the very first sight, I thought it would be boring. Title has no potential at all. However, one point for the effort. It's not easy to think of a better title, I know.

Poster & Background & Trailer (-)
I'm not grading you here even if you have a background, there's nothing interesting about it except the fact that it's MyungYeol in chibi style or whatever they call it.

Description & Foreword (5/10)       
Honestly, it sounds interesting in the description. It's like 'Wow, a fanfic like a behind a scene of MyungYeol' Lol. It sounds something like that which captures my attention a bit. As for the foreword, it was good as well but there's nothing really catchy.

Plot (4/10)

Actually, I loved the description but when I started reading your one-shot, I thought it was boring and well disgusting. I mean - I've read before, but I don't think I've read myungyeol before so this is actually my first time to read about them having . And it's kind of annoying how Sungyeol is the one who tease Myungsoo. I hate how he sounds so seductive in your one-shot. Maybe, I'm just not used to it. Hmm... I don't know but I was just disgusted and annoyed. It was a good story though, and if you proofread to get the errors gone, this would be a better one-shot with neat and clean writing style.

Overall, the story's nice itself just a bit you-know-what. That's just my opinion.

Originality (4/10)

I think the only original story in your one-shot is the part that they are actually dating behind the scenes and about the Pepero thing or their show. That part was somewhat original.

Flow (4/5)
It was good.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary(13/30)
I found a lot actually. It's everywhere. You go to past then present and vice versa. Aside from that, there are more. If you want me to give some errors you had, just tell me.

Writing Style (2/10)
To be brutally honest, I don't like it. Usually Rated M stories have a different writing style, they are usually neat and clean but yours is a bit messy in style and words. When writing, don't use Kekeke. We use that kind of laugh when messaging each other. There are other words I think was funny like CYEAH or CH and the use of Kekeke with ~. Small letters in the beginning of a quotation or saying. It's a mess.

Overall Enjoyment (2/10)
It was fine, but I didn't fully enjoy it. Maybe it would be better if you had a clean writing style and less errors.

Oh, and don't be distracted if you don't like the score. Remember, these are just my opinions.

Total – 35/90%

Reviewer: sususco123