Well, a bet is a bet ,right?

Title (5/10)
I don’t see the relation to the story yet,but Im waiting for it. And also the use of capital letter. You HAVE to use capital for every each words on the title.

Foreword (8/10)
It is fine and you showed them the characters. But with explained the character in the first will not make readers try to find out about the person itself. Well there’s always good and bad side right ?

Originality (6/10)
It’s not really original. And there’s no new thing I read in your fanfic. Everything just like usual. Just like the other bet ff.

Plot(1/5)
It runs too fast ! seriously. Give a little break to your story.
Just like this :
The next day in the classroom...
'Hey!' yelled Minho.
'Um...We're friends now,right?'
...................................... ( 22 sentences more)
'Huh?' Yuri finally had dropped down to Earth.
'Nice to meet you!'said Yuri as she swooned over him.
'Erm...Nice to meet you!...'Siwon said awkwardly.
'She's weird and really creeps me out...'thought Siwon and flashed Yuri a not-so-friendly grin.
_________________________________________________________________________________________The next morning...
See how fast your story goes ? try to the little things usual happen in the school or things happen between rival or bestfriend.



Characters(5/15)
The use of POV is confusing. Fisrt you use the people inside the story POV but in the next chapter ( not really even in the first chapter in bottom thu use of POV started to chnage into other POV) . So I conclude you use 3rd person other characters POV.
The characters are not strong enough to build the story. You use the 3rd person other characters POV. It is harder than using1st or 3rd person first character POV. (there are 3 ways to use POV). With using this POV you need to explain everything more spesific since none of the person inside the story will explain this. You.you the writer have to explain this. What Imean by this is setiing (situation,times,place),plot,characters,theme,language,and others which involved to build a story.

Grammar(7/10)
I didn't find too many mistakes !

Other (3/10)
The poster is fine, the background also was fine but it did not really connect to the story. Here is the important thing. I know this is just a little thing but in a writing you have to use this -- “ sentence”
Not this --‘sentence’ for me this is a big mistake. Because with ‘.....’ it will not be a direct speech. I don’t even know what is it called. Change it to “....” see what I mean ?

Extra(3/15)
What else I can say ? the story still on progress anyway. Keep writing !

I enjoy the story (4/15)
a. Umm (no)
b. Yeah(ok, kinda of)
c. Okay (yes)
d. Elastic(really like)

I’m sorry but for me this story goes too fast.

Total : 42/100 %

reviewed by: Mikayla