Beauty in the Eye of the Beholder

Title (2/5)

While the title does fit the story, I think it’s too long. I don’t like titles with too many words in
them, especially for a one-shot.

Poster/Background/Trailer (/10)

Description & Foreword (4/10)

In the description you put stuff like word count, genre, rating…why? There’s no point to it
and no one really likes to find stuff like that when they’re looking for a story to read. The little
description you have is too the point and blunt.

The foreword wasn’t particularly interesting and it didn’t draw me in and want to continue
reading.

Plot (5/10)

I didn’t really understand what the story was about and so I can’t really give you high marks on
this.

Originality (/10)

Taking this out because I didn’t get the plot.

Flow (4/5)

It was okay.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (30/30)

I didn’t find any mistakes!

Writing Style (6/10)

You have an okay writing style but it wasn’t great. There was more dialogue than actual
paragraphs and that’s a sign of a beginner writer.

Piece of advice: use linebreak and justify the text so it doesn’t look so sloppy.

Overall Enjoyment (0/10)

Speaks for itself.

51/80%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs