Paris: The City of My Heart

Title (5/5)

Interesting title and very catchy, it draws attention and just one look makes you think it’s going to be one of those
really good, serious stories that are totally worth reading.

Poster/Background/Trailer (6/10)

Why is Jung Yoogeun in the poster when they have a daughter? Other than that it’s a good poster, despite the
random black part on it which kind of takes away from it. I don’t like the background, it doesn’t really make sense
unless it has something to do with the last chapter.

Description and Forward (8/10)

Could be worded a bit differently.

Like this:

Gare d’Austerlitz.

They were supposed to meet there.

Ten years later, the meeting is long overdue.

Plot (10/10)
Really good, I have nothing to say about it because it’s so perfect.

Originality (8/10)

For the most part, I haven’t read a story on this site about two lovers in Paris. However, the main thing is they fell in
love and were separated due to one’s involvement in the mafia and that’s really cliché.

Flow (5/5)

Perfect. You don’t move too fast or drag things out, which is really good. While it does jump around from the time

frames, that just gives the story a boost.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (28/30)

Everything is good, I couldn’t find any grammar, spelling, or vocabulary mistakes. However for dialogue, there is
one thing that needs changed.

“Who were those guys?,” I asked out of curiousity.

Don’t use the comma if there is already another punctuation mark.

And you spelled ‘obba’ wrong, it’s supposed to be ‘oppa’.

Writing Style (10/10)

You have an amazing writing style. While reading I felt that I was reading a real book and not a fanfiction.

Overall Enjoyment (10/10)

I really enjoyed it and am waiting for the last chapter! Truly one of the best stories I’ve read!

Total Score : 90/100

Congratz. You will be in the recommended list <3

reviewed by: peacelovehugs