Mist Of The Spirit

Title (3/5)

You chose an interesting title to use and it made me think of something a published book would
be called. However, that being said, I didn’t understand how it portrayed the story.

Poster/Background/Trailer (3/10)

The poster is very plain. A lot of people on the site judge a story by it’s poster, just something
to think about. Also, the trees in the background and poster, what’s the point of them? Is there
something about Sehun’s past that has to do with a forest? If something doesn’t pertain to the
story don’t put it in the poster.

Description & Foreword (8/10)

Good description, made me want to keep reading it. You write mysterious aura very nicely.

Plot (6/10)

It’s a very interesting plot but I didn’t actually understand the point of it. Like, it felt like it was
going in no particular direction. But then again, you only have six chapters and I’m sure there is
more to come.

Originality (8/10)

While the overall plot is someone falling in love with a ghost, which is somewhat common, you
made it your own. It’s interesting and different from other’s with the basic outline.

Flow (3/5)

The flow isn’t bad, but you sort of rush into things. It’s not like you write too many twist in the
plot, but things happened so quickly without much details.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (27/30)

I did find a few mistakes, but they were just silly small ones.

Writing Style (8/10)

You have a good writing style, but the format of it looks a bit awkward.

Overall Enjoyment (8/10)

It was enjoyable, but there was something about it that made it seem awkward and a little plain,
like you need something to spice it up.

Total Score: 74/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs