This Is Not an Indie Love Song

a. Title (5/5) - All I can say is that I love the title. It's not cliché, at least for me and I found it as an amazing title in its own story style. I found it appealing too and thought that the title has something to do with a song comparing it to life (I meant, love life). But I still love the title! 

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (7/10) - The poster is cool, I like the way you edited it like it was painted. It is just simple yet the font you used is not very well appealing combining it with the poster. Well, that's just me.  The background is okay too, since it's simple and it doesn't give pain in the eye.

c. Description & Foreword (7/10) - I like your description, though it doesn't reveal too much of your story. It is just fine that you are making readers wonder what happens about Sungmin and Kyuhyun's love story. As for the foreword, well, thanks for the warning that it is Rated H and that it's a BoyXBoy .

d. Plot (7/10) - I like it, it's like a light drama/light romance portrayed by boy lovers and a little angst (I really love angst stories) . The problem is it doesn't intrigue me very much so -1! I found it a little boring yet also a little interesting in a few parts. The ending is also satisfying (and I'm a bit unsatisfied at the same time), but how I wished I knew what really happened to them in the end since you never knew too as written.

e. Originality (6/10) - I think your story isn't exactly original. But I like the way that Kyuhyun have a past that he wants to forget. And the ending was a cliffhanger.

f. Flow (4/5) - For me, it's slow (although it's just a one-shot) but of course, I'm glad it wasn't rushed too.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (36/40) - Actually, you don't have so many mistakes. Just a few mistakes and it's not really a big problem! So Two Thumbs Up!

So here are a few mistakes:

“Just for old times sake?” (You should use a punctuation mark after "times" , like this " Just for old times' sake?" )

And not just puppydog cute. (Just put a space between puppy and dog. Puppy Dog.)

Sometimes they sang, sometimes they talked, sometimes they went out, sometimes they got drunk. (and sometimes they got drunk. I think you should add "and" before the last word (sometimes) )

He started deleting texting conversations, hiding questionable books in his school locker, even stopped gaming temporarily. (again, just add "and" before "even".)  the door open, the chair next to it. (like above , add "add" again before the "the chair next to it.")

Only to find his mother standing in the doorway, arms crossed on her chest, thunder and lighting in her eyes. (I don't think you should really use the word "lighting"? That should be "lightning" instead, right?)

loosing his ity (loosing is rigid or fixed, so you should use "losing" because it's the right word to be used with losing his ity.)

Well, like I said there's really not much to worry about your grammar ,punctuations, vocabulary or spellings! Your grammars are very well organized and the characterization in the story is just perfect ! I love it! Bravo! Bravo!

h. Writing Style (10/10) - I like your writing style. Neat and clean, I don't have a problem with it . So keep it up!

Total Score : 82/100