Dear Diary Grant Me A Wish

a. Title (3/5)

It sounds good, but it's not eye-catching. I was not even attracted with the title (that's just me) and thought this would be another diary entry thing with the main role but it's pretty fine since the title is just what your story is about.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (8/10)

A cute and attractive poster you got there. I have no complaints.

c. Description & Foreword (8/10)

It was okay, making the diary as the entry but I think you should have added characters description too. There are errors in your capitalization too (in the description)

d. Plot (5/10)

I've seen this kind of plot before and it kinda annoys me because Krystal likes Minho a lot, so early. It was so early for her to have that kind of feeling over him, so yeah it's annoying. You could have made their relationship gloom first. Honestly, your plot is boring and common.

e. Originality (4/10)

I'm kind of disappointed with this one. This is not original at all, but I think it got it's funny side which is your creativeness. The fact that Victoria helps Krystal to get Minho like her, it was fun to read but at the same time, it annoys me because Krystal seems to be head over heels to Minho when nothing interesting happened to them yet.

f. Flow (2/5)

I think it was rushed so that's why I didn't like much, the feelings are too rushed and Krystal changed too fast. In the first three chapters, it was super.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (25/30)

Few mistakes again, but these are mistakes you didn't mean to do actually. So, no big deal. You just have to check all the words that should be capitalize, the right punctuation to use and where to use it. Yeah, you have a problem with capitalization and wrong use of punctuation but you can check it again.

h. Writing Style (8/10)

I don't know what to say but this is just the same with your previous story. You write in a simple way, a neat and clean manner and a descriptive one.


i. Overall Enjoyment (4/10) -

A little bit fun because of Victoria's F.T.S. but overall it disappoints me. You actually had my hopes high for this because of your previous story, but this one it's so annoying but I don't hate it, I just didn't enjoy it and the past with Minho doesn't help at all.

Total Score: 67/100 %