Our Little Secrets

a. Title (3/5)

It didn't really draw my attention but the title relates to your story, so good.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (7/10)

I like the color used for your poster and it's also nice. The background used is okay although it sometimes hurts my eye because there are too many people (LOL). That's just me, please understand.

c. Description & Foreword (10/10)

Perfectly written. It's neat and understandable. You also described the characters very well.

d. Plot (6/10)

I think it's a little bit interesting. I like the fact that Wooyoung is a killer and the 4 sisters are living under the same roof with him and well yeah, this story is full of little secrets. I like it that there are four them sisters, I really like the characters especially Wooyoung. I like it, but I didn't really love the plot.

e. Originality (6/10)

I'm not so sure if it is. But I guess people with secrets are not original, but then again, you added your own creativity (like the cute and funny scenes) which made it interesting enough.

f. Flow (2/5)

At first, I thought it was slow but it got better in the later chapters. I thought the sisters just had what we call the "boring" life, I didn't like it until Wooyoung came out. I liked it the best with Tiffany and Wooyoung's secret part.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (27/30)

I didn't really see major mistakes, I hope I'm not wrong. Maybe it's just that you used "watcha gonna" something like that words, but it's not a big mistake, just not necessary to write it for a story I guess. Also this, "What the hell do you want this us?” (Chapter 5), when Tiffany asked that, I didn't understand very well. Did she mean "what the hell do you want with us?" or maybe the word "this" should just be "these". I don't know, just check it for yourself. 2. she was becoming way to familiar with. (chap.5) , it should be "way too familiar with". 3. running a antique shop and renting out rooms to tourists right, (chap. 5) running an antique shop ...(etc.) since the noun is a vowel. You just have to check your misspellings and also the wrong punctuations. But I really like the way you write, it's actually neat and easy to understand. You're good in English and you will be better if you proof read it.

h. Writing Style (10/10)

It's great. Neat author's point of view.

i. Overall Enjoyment (5/10) - 

I didn't really enjoy it that much, I'll say 50/50. One part is exciting, the next it's not, the enjoyment always drops to zero.

Total Score  :  76/100%