You Make Me Stronger

Title (3/5)

While the title did catch my interest, I don’t see how it pertains to the story.

Poster/Background/Trailer (7/10)

The poster is cute and it fits the tone of the story, but it’s a little plain.

Description & Foreword (6/10)

The description was good up until you wrote “This story follows…”

Don’t write stuff like that, it makes you look really immature and like you don’t know what
you’re doing.

The foreword was a good scene from the story. When I first saw it was really curious to see what
happens, and then I completely forgot about it as I started reading the story. Very nice.

Plot (5/10)

The plot was okay, but it wasn’t anything that made me want to keep reading it. It’s mostly
because I’ve seen it so many times before and reading the same plot over and over gets boring.

Originality (3/10)

Pretty much every story on this site fits into a group, defined by what the author’s think. Each
story fits a basic plot that everyone works off of, so every story is pretty much the same. But
anyone can take a cliché storyline and make it their own. Unfortunately I didn’t see that from
you. There wasn’t anything in the story that made it your own and different from other’s that
share the same plot.

Everyone comes across cute and fluffy stories on the site and we all read them; some more than
others. But when I started reading your story all I was thinking was, ‘Oh, it’s another one of
these stories.’

It’s okay to use the generic plots, everyone does it. Just make sure you add in twists and turns
that make it your story, so people don’t keep guessing what comes next. Keep your readers on
their toes, and make them stay up at night wandering what happens next instead of, ‘I knew that
was going to happen.’

Flow (4/5)

The flow was not bad, but some parts moved a little quickly and others a little slowly.

Grammar/Spelling/Punctuation/Vocabulary (30/30)

Perfect.

Writing Style (7/10)

You have a very nice writing style! Everything was neatly written and sentence structures were
great…it was good to read something written so well.

However, as good as it is, you definitely have room to improve. The story is mainly focused
on cute romance and fluff, which you write amazingly, but I’m wondering if you were to write
something different would it be as good?

Take angst, for example. There are so many doors to open when writing something of that genre.
Do you think you could take your writing to the next level, or will you be one of the writers that
can only writer fluff?

You definitely have a lot of potential and I really hope you continue writing, because I can see
you going somewhere with it. After you finish this story, I really think you should try a different
type of genre, something besides romance.

When I was reading your story, it was cute and all but I like to read something that I can picture
in my head like a movie, something that really makes me think.

Characters: Your characters are written nicely, but they are a little one-dimensional. They each
have their own plot going on, but they lack personality and thoughts. You give them a happy
face and a sad face, but there is so much more a character needs.

Setting: You do tie in the setting with the story, but there needs to be more to it than just sitting
in a classroom. Use their surroundings to connect with their thoughts and actions.

Emotion: Again, it’s generically romance written here. You did try to add some sadness when
Woohyun and Sunggyu sort of broke apart, but it was not written very well since you have too
much other stuff going on. Or when Sungjong was in the hospital, the emotion written was very
blunt. Make the reader feel the emotions, not just read it.

Overall Enjoyment (4/10)

I did not enjoy the story much. Yes, you have a nice style of writing, but Infinite just doesn’t
interest me and romance stories aren’t my thing.

Total Score: 69/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs