It is a little catchy and I would see it and think it’s going to be a cute story, which yours is. But I’ve seen the title before so I took off two points.

Poster & Background & Trailer (10/10)
Absolutely adorable. The poster and background go well with each other and I really like that you put a couple name, ‘woogyu’ in it.

Description & Foreword(3/10)
Honestly, it was a little iffy. It doesn’t sound right at all, you could have worded it different to be catchier.

“When Sunggyu’s parents told him that he was to be married to none other than Nam Woohyun, his first reaction was to freak out. How could he be forced to marry someone that he hates? Not to mention that they each had their own boyfriend’s that they loved! So how exactly were they going to live their daily lives in a marriage that was bound to fail?

Follow their story and see how in the end they turn out to be the cute ‘Woogyu’ couple!”

This sounds catchier and the sentence structure makes it sound more grammatically correct.

The character bios should be formatted a bit different too. Don’t you the word ‘duhh’ and ‘~’ in them.

Like this:

“Nam Woohyun is a college playboy and the guy that everyone wants as their boyfriend. With a great love for hot chocolate that matches his affection for his boyfriend, Key, the one thing that brings out Woohyun’s hatred is Sunggyu.”

Plot (4/10)
Not good at all. It’s almost like there is no plot, just the fact that two guys are being forced to marry each other.  You need to add more details to the story.


Originality(4/10)
Completely cliché. Forced into an arranged marriage is the most overused plot on the site. There barely any originality despite the fact that you used two males instead of male and female.   
 

Flow(1/5)

You move way too fast. One chapter you introduce characters, the next you write that they’re getting married. Slow down and add some more to the story.
 

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary(25/30)
Everything was pretty good, but you should fix the dialogue.

His umma sat beside him just to start talking to him,

‘Gyu ah~’

‘Yeah?’ Sunggyu answered as he was putting rice in his mouth, eating so fast as he was hungry.

‘Slow down, son.’ His appa looked worried if his umma’s words will choke him with food.

‘Since…you’re already 22…I think it’s best if you get married.’

His umma’s words only made Sunggyu to laugh.

‘Umma, your joke is funny. And also I don’t want to get married yet, I’m still young.’ Sunggyu thought his mother wasn’t serious, but she was.

It should be like this:

Taking the seat next to her son, Sunggyu’s mother started the meal off with a conversation.

“Gyu-ah,” She said in a passive tone.

“Yeah?” Sunggyu answered as he ate a mouthful of rice, completely ravenous.

“Slow down, son,” His father said, worried that the conversation might shock him into choking on his food.

“Your father and I have been thinking, Sunggyu. You’re already twenty-two, it’s about time that you get married,” His mother said lightly. However, Sunggyu just laughed and shook his head disbelievingly at his mother’s words.

“Umma, your joke is funny but I don’t want to get married yet; I’m still young,” He replied, thinking his mother wasn’t serious; unfortunately she was being as serious as a heart attack.

Writing Style(3/10)
You have a very premature style of writing and it’s completely all over the place. The sentence structures are really bad and some of the word choices just don’t fit.



Overall Enjoyment(3/10)
It has potential to be cute and a good story, but I recommend you have someone edit your story.  You have a lot of subscribers and that’s a good thing, but I think that if you get this edited then a lot more people would come to read it.

Total: 56/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs