Title (5/5)
The title strikes out at me as interesting! I would definitely click on a ff with an interesting title such as this one.

Poster & Background & Trailer (9/10)
The poster and background are both great because it really gives the feel of your fanfic which is greatly appreciated— but I just kind of wished to see a face on the poster.

Description & Foreword (3/10)
The description was not a description— rather it was just a credit to the person who made your poster— a description should contain a small, short summary of your fanfic! It’s the part that makes a reader interested in your fanfic because the description is seen when searching for a fanfic to read and if your description only says “Poster by blah,” there will only be little viewing of the story. The foreword is okay though I think you could have added something more to it.

All in all, your description and foreword combined was not good.

Plot (9/10)
The plot of this fanfic really intriuges! I love supernatural-y, angsty, horror fanfics and this one definitely just blew my mind! I’m actually really curious about what’s to happen and how the fanfic will end.

Originality (10/10)
Full points for the originality! I love how you made up an imaginary world with these mysterious creatures. It’s thrilling and refreshing to read!

Flow (4/5)
The flow didn’t lack speed nor was it too slow but I think you could have gone another with what’s going on. I like how you start it out and all but I think that things should start to pace up more since the last update was just about how Willow finally takes a leave and goes to look for these creatures, or Carnivores.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)
Other than a couple of word confusion in the chapters, your use for vocabulary and grammar is spot on!

Writing Style (8/10)
Definitely loved the writing style; you gave me an intense mood when necessary and a not so intense mood when not necessary. I love how you write out the characters, explaining their flaws and whatnot rather than having a character information in the foreword like most fanfics; so it’s deeply appreciated!

Overall Enjoyment (6/10)
I actually enjoyed the story overall but there were just a couple of things I felt unsure about while reading the story. Like in the first chapter, you introduced Joon— then his name was quickly changed to Chansung. Now I do like MBLAQ but I didn’t know Joon’s real name was Chansung until the author’s note you gave at the end, so I was confused. What I think you should have done was to write in that Joon’s real name was Chansung instead of just writing down Chansung and expecting us to know.

Then, the other thing is when Willow is suddenly being attacked by these so-called ‘shadows.’ My mind went blank right after she saw the shadows and I was confused on what was happening. I had to re-read a couple of the sentences before it to understand what was going on because the only I got from it was Willow seeing a shadow and then… this shadow came towards her and a bunch of other ‘shadows’ appeared. Then the main shadow twists her wrist and it bleeds then the shadows quickly disappear. I think you could have explained that part a bit better— it was pretty much a big blur.

All in all, I wanted to know whose body it was on Joon’s bed. Was it Myungsoo’s body or some other body? I don’t know BUT I think I would give this story a try if you decide to continue it because I love suspense! So if you ever think of getting off that hiatus then I’ll come and search for this story.

Total - 83/100

reviewed by: vangbby