Invasion of the Angels

Title (3/5)

The title is okay but it’s really cliché. Even if the story is about angels, try not to put that into the
title.

Poster/Background/Trailer (10/10)

There was only a trailer and it was absolutely amazing. I would have liked to see a poster for it
though. You don’t have to put pictures of the characters in it, just like the title and some angel
wings would look really cool.

Description & Foreword (10/10)

Great! I don’t think I’ve ever given anyone a 10/10 for this part!

I really like how you put the angels and fallen angels and the two girls, if you hadn’t then a lot of
people would get confused when reading the story.

Plot (10/10)

It was a good plot, as always. You guys always come up with really nice plots and they always
catch my attention.

Originality (4/10)

Unfortunately there are way too many angel fics on this site so I docked some points, and then
I’ve read two about angels battling each other. However, this plot reminded me greatly of a
book I’d read last year so I docked some more points. I know that you came up with it on your
own, but it’s a bit risky when something is too much like a book because you never know when
someone might try and flag you on it.

Flow (4/5)

The flow was good, but the the beginning was a little rushed when you were introducing the
characters and I got a little confused, so you should slow down just a bit.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)

Pretty much everything was perfect, but there was one thing I noticed.

After dialogue you should end with a comma unless it’s an exclamation or a question and then
always after a dialogue you need to begin the next word with a capital letter.

Writing Style (10/10)

This was written absolutely beautifully and I felt as if I were reading a published book.

Overall Enjoyment (6/10)

As good as it was, I’m not a huge fan of angel stories. I’m more of a dark magic person or angst.

Total Score: 86/100%

Congratz! Your story will be on the recommended list!

reviewed by: peacelovehugs