A Perfect Time.

a. Title (2/5)
Not very eye-catching, and too common. There's a lot of fics with the same title as yours, and although it got something to say with your story it still didn't catch my attention.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (6.5/10)
Everything you used is the same SEOHAE picture, I think it's cute but it's just them and surely a lot of people had seen that couple-like picture of them. But maybe at least you made something with the title, that maybe can catch people's attention and read more. Making it as a background hurts my eyes too, that's just me okay? Due to overusing my laptop, my eyes are getting worse.

c. Description & Foreword (10/10)

I just love the way you wrote everything. Great summary, and great character informations. Just what I needed and good there's nothing revealed much. The foreword is so sweet, I like it.

d. Plot (7/10)

The plot's so cute, I love how Donghae is so captivated in Seohyun. They look so cute together, just by reading your story. Maybe, I just didn't like the part with Yoona not helping the maknae carry a lot of things and instead Donghae, who is from another band is the one helping.

e. Originality (6/10)
It's not very original. The plot is too common, the lovey-dovey between Seohyun and Donghae is. But with the little creativity, that gave me goosebumps like when there was a blackout in SMNET building and when Donghae saw all the things in Seohyun's room, all Keroro things, I just laughed out loud it was so funny to read. But if you ask me, I was not hooked on your story because it was predictable in many ways.

f. Flow (5/5)
It's not slow or rushed, it was just going fine for a four-shot story.

g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (20/30)

No major mistakes, but the punctuations. Like in one sentence the author's point of view continues narrating without even a comma, like not even a brief pause. There's also a spelling mistake in Chapter one when Donghae thought "why am I being like thins?" I think you just didn't notice, it should have been "this". The way you write makes me have to reread it too, one paragraph is too long with two people talking in just one paragraph. Erm, it's hard to explain but you have to watch out with your punctuations.

h. Writing Style (7/10)

Frankly, I don't like your writing style. Except that it's clean. As I mentioned in your Grammar stuffs, one paragraph thing with two or three characters talking makes it confusing.


i. Overall Enjoyment (8/10) -

I enjoyed it but not so much, because sometimes it's annoying (that's why your story is so good, ha-ha) and sometimes it's too boring, SEOHAE's first meeting. I find it boring and no creativity in it, and annoying that Donghae was captivated by her even when he's around with his girlfriend, Yoona. But still, I enjoyed it until the end.

Total Score: 71.5/100%