Cold Medicine

Title (5/5): I really like the title! It sounds sinister though, but at the same time, like a lot of healing will be done, but not like the cold, doctorial way of healing where it’s only medicine. It has more of the feel of a mother nurturing her sick child. I swear I can taste medicine on my tongue now~ XP

Poster/Trailer/Background (10/10): The poster is actually very relevant! I love it! This story does take place after/during the Paradise promos so using pics from that era was a very smart idea! Even the background picture was amazing, even though it was also very plain and simple. Well done! ^^ <3

Description/Foreword (10/10): Ah~ What can I say? The description and foreword are totally well written!! I especially love how you turned “Namgrease” into “Namcold”. It’s cute~~ The feel of the small snippets of dialogue seem progressively suspenseful. It totally hooks a reader into the story. Truthfully, I’ve tried reading WooGyu stories and there haven’t been any that really caught my attention, but this is amazing! 

Plot (10/10): The plot is brilliant! I love the reiteration of sickness and cold medicine. It’s definitely important, and the scenes with the illness are always the ones with the most impact. You did a wonderful job in portraying care and support through sickness. 

Originality (10/10): This is definitely original! I’ve never seen a story like this before. It’s very cute too, especially the Sunggyu sickness scenes because he’s so adorable when he’s high off of a fever~ XD I really like the idea of this story and how it was put together.

Flow (4/5): The flow was pretty steady most of the time. My one complaint would be that the beginning was a bit too slow, but at the same time, it was good to have a slow beginning so that everyone could realize their feelings. 

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (20/30): I can see that you’re not a native speaker, no? There were many places that were grammatically incorrect, but as far as spelling, everything was spelled correctly! You have no idea how much I love you since everything was spelled correctly! ^^ <3 But there were a few spelling errors in each chapter. There were also many punctuation errors, even in the foreword. But overall, you did amazingly! If you want everything to be unerringly perfect, I suggest maybe getting someone to beta your chapters, but otherwise, you did a magnificent job with your English!

Writing Style (9/10): I really love the way you write. It’s dramatic and extremely cute. You can definitely pull emotions out of readers, so I like that. A story without emotions is a documentary, so seeing all this angst is amazing! I love angst~ XD <3

Overall Enjoyment (9/10): OMG~ I loved this story a lot! I usually HATE MyungYeol (because I shop MyungJong~ ^^) but Myungsoo and Sungyeol’s relationship in this story worked so well together! I really liked it~ I do find it a bit weird that seeing as that Jaejoong and Yunho are actual singers, you randomly put them in as doctors~ XD It’s plausible, but it’s odd~ I really can’t see Jaejoong being a doctor because of how… odd he is and I think he would actually be very weak hearted when faced with a patient, but Yunho… Yeah I can see him being a doctor~ XD <3

Total: 87/100

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reviewer: Star_Sarang