My Best Friend is a Cross-Dresser?

Title (1/5)

I don’t like the title, it’s too cliché and I’ve seen two or three other stories with the same general
title. The story is more than just Sunha being a crossdresser, so don’t title it after that.

Poster/Background/Trailer (2/10)

The poster is boring and all it is is four pictures side by side. It looks like something you made in
paint, nothing amazing. The background doesn’t match it either.

Description & Foreword (5/10)

The description interest me at all, I think you could have come up with something better than just
the basic idea. Give us a little insight for what’s to come.

Plot (4/10)

The plot…it’s just so much like a manga, where there’s hardly any words and it’s all pretty
pictures. There was nothing about it that caught my attention and I don’t particularly like stories
about cross-dressing or gender-bending.

But you know, you wrote that Yun and Sunha have been best friends, wouldn’t Yun have noticed
something by now? That’s completely unrealistic that she didn’t and that Sunha only got nervous
when they had to move in together (which that idea is dumb too, by the way).

Originality (5/10)

I’ve seen several cross-dressing stories on this site where the person sneaks into school as the
opposite gender and one person knows and in the end they fall in love with each other. Overused
and much too common.

Flow (3/5)

You don’t have enough details written for it to have good flow. It bounces all over the place with
every chapter. You need to drag things out a bit instead of rushing into everything.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)

Absolutely perfect! I couldn’t find any mistakes at all! The only thing, though, don’t put ~ in
dialogue.

Writing Style (6/10)

You don’t have a bad writing style at all but you could definitely improve. You write too much
without giving enough details and the story lacks proper emotion. Like I said before, it’s like
reading a manga, which I think you would be good at writing.

But other than that, it was nice to read. You have the not-so-serious writing style, where there’s
more dialogue and interaction with characters than paragraphs, which isn’t entirely a bad thing.

Overall Enjoyment (4/10)

Honestly I didn’t like it because I don’t enjoy these types of stories.

Just a tip: Don’t add so many idols in it. Chose one group and stick with them or it just becomes
really annoying to read.

Total Score: 59/100%

reviewed by: peacelovehugs