Mists and Legoblock Cliffs

a. Title (4/5)
I liked the title, but I still couldn’t understand what it meant even after reading through all the one-shots. Lol.

b. Poster & Background & Trailer (10/10)
I admire the simplicity of the poster. It’s not flashy and distracting, but it’s not too simple to the point of being boring. It serves its purpose well which is giving the reader a glimpse of what the fic is gonna be about, and your poster does just that.


c. Description & Foreword (10/10)
Nothing much to be said about this part. No annoying character charts, no overblown summaries.


d. Plot (10/10)
Each oneshot had a concise plot and were all fun to read.

e. Originality (8/10)
Okay. Most of the oneshots in this collection weren’t very original honestly, because there’s a lot of fluffy oneshots in this website that are very very similar to the ones that you’ve written. BUT, the difference between your oneshots and the majority of those in AFF lies in composition. You are a great writer, and your skills in composition alone succeeded in transforming over-used fluffy situations into heart-warming stories that had your voice in them. Good job!


f. Flow (5/5)
Flowed very well.


g. Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (28/30)
Very minor errors with tense consistency. Nothing you can’t fix.


h. Writing Style (10/10)
I don’t normally give full scores for this section, but I will for you because I ABSOLUTELY loved your writing. Your imagery was vivid and I became immersed in the world you crafted with your prose. I have read many fanfics on this website and so far, you’re the only writer who’s managed to hook me in completely into your stories. It was as if I were at the movie theater watching Changmin and Sooyoung pursue their romance on the big screen. What you’ve done is something that many writers aspire to do and that is, make their readers have an out-of-body experience while reading their stories, which is really difficult because words are inherently boring things. But you did it, and I congratulate you for that.



i. Overall Enjoyment (10/10)
Each oneshot in this collection was a gem. My favorite was chapter 8. ;) iest oneshot I’ve ever read. I had to get a glass of water after reading it.

Total- 95/100

Congratz! You will be in the recommended list!

reviewed by: indielokimin