*---Come-With-Me---*

Title (1/5)
The title does not reflect off of your one-shot therefore it was not a good title to pick. The one-shot is more about heartbreak and then finding the one—‘Come with Me’ says nothing about that. Also, I don’t understand the whole adding in an asterisk and three dashes. It’s not appealing and I just don’t get why it’s there.

Poster & Background & Trailer (1/10)
Being a graphic artist myself, I do not love the poster—it looks really amateurish and it makes your story look bad, to be honest. A poster is like the cover of a book. If the cover isn’t appealing, most people would find the book to be boring or won’t continue reading. The cutouts of the characters should not look like that; rather, I suggest that the characters should be blended together. Cutouts of characters should be only appropriate for comedic stories rather than angst-y, heartbroken stories. The font used is really amateurish and your username at the corner shouldn’t be that big.

There are better poster shops to request from; I would suggest is this one.

No background or trailer, so no points are taken off.

Description & Foreword (4/10)
I’m just going to simply say your description should contain what you wrote in the summary. It’s more appropriate and a description is called a description for a reason.

The foreword should not contain only contain credit or an author’s note, it should have contained a prologue, excerpt, or quote that is relevant to your story/one-shot.

Plot (4/10)
I don’t like the plot because it’s really generic—heartbreak; finding the one whose always been there for you. Nothing special—but I did it find cute!

Originality (4/10)
I don’t know if I would really call it an original because your plot is generic and it doesn’t really have any twist to it.

Flow (5/5)
The flow is fine.

Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (29/30)
I couldn’t find any errors, but I think you overused the ellipses.

Writing Style (9/10)
I like your writing style—very descriptive! The only complaint I would have (and the reason why I took off points) is because you decided to add in an author’s note in the middle of your chapter. That doesn’t look good.

Overall Enjoyment (5/10)
The one-shot was alright—I’m not exactly a huge fan of any SM shippings, to be honest, so I couldn’t enjoy it wholly. I did find the one-shot sweet towards the end and your writing is really nice!

Total – 62/100

Reviewer: vangbby