Review: Coming Home     Review for BeautifulTarget_       Title and Story link:    Coming Home (Completed one-shot)       Title: (9/10)   It was original and relates well to the storyline.           Poster: (-/10)   There wasn't any poster for the story hence couldn't be graded but it's recommended to get a poster for a great story like yours.           Description and Foreword: (17/20)    Two marks was deducted because the author's note 'Eek ok so I had been meaning to write…' should be separated from the excerpt/description of the story.  Place author's note and credits all in the foreword and place all of the description of the story and the quote at the description.           Storyline/Plot: (17/20)   Although the plot was original, it's lacking in connection and the storyline was slightly too short. The connection between Kai and Kyungsoo should be shown here by maybe having a flashback at how close or how much they love each other and that will create a better connection for the story.        Another thing is I felt that the story was way too short. Just as I was enjoying it and expecting something unexpected, the story ends. You could add what happens next when they got home and how badly Kyungsoo was coping when Kai isn't around and how much it affected him vice-versa. I felt that the ending will be even more interesting by having a plot twist- Kai really did get into an accident. This will further the intense and better the storyline since you mentioned that Kyungsoo was worried about Kai getting into an accident and be handicapped.       Your quote was really good, it was stuck in my head ever since. ''I'm back.'' ''I know.''       Characters: (7/10)   I almost gave a full score because the character's role was clear- Kai is a soldier while Kyungsoo is his boyfriend and both of th