Review for curionenene       Title and Story Link:   Zinnia (Completed with 6 chapters)       Title: (7/10)   The title was well-thought of and it was original! However, at first I didn't take any interst in the title at all but after reading the story, the title relates to the story well and was extremely to remember right away.       Overall Appearance: (7/10)   The poster was well made and it looks neat! I love how you place the main characters at the top of the poster and add a picture that relates to your story as a background. Just one look and the poster could already start to tell a story, great job! What I could add to make it better is the shading and blending of the characters, it look a little out of place if you take a closer look.    The background picture was perfect as it didn't distract the readers at all but still manage to make the page look less plain than not having any background picture.       Description and Foreword: (6/10)   I find that the content of the description and foreword repetitive. You should have an extremely different content for the description and foreword but it seems that both are delivering the same content and information. For the description, reading it was a little awkward because of the sentence struture.    Description:   -Only, these dreams come at a cost. On the side of the customer, it is copious sums of money... but what of the side of the provider? What exactly do they give?   (Only that these dreams comes true with a price to pay. For the customer, it is a copious sum of money and temporary freedom but what will the provider give in return?)       For the foreword, you repeated the word 'colour' too much and it wasn't descriptive enough. You could add a few more sentences on how the place look like or explain what Zinnia means etc.       Plot: (18/20)    The plot was original and it was definitely my first time reading such story. It's as though I've stepped into a whole new world with Zinnia, crown prince and the floating world. I was blown away with the plot and very much enjoyed it! I feel that it could have been better if you would to have a better description of how the place looks like in details because it's quite vague. The love line between Hyukjae and Donghae was also good and realistic, I love the chemistry they have and how Hyukjae treats Donghae! I love the story even more knowing it's not a all perfect story where Hyukjae will buy Donghae and ran away together but istead it have a hint of reality in it. With the drugs, mama-san's cruelty and the crown prince's warning to Donghae about opposition, Donghae escaping and the part where he almost died, it made the story realistic.       Language: (11/20)   I was impressed with your huge range of vocabulary and you use them correctly too but you need to work on your tenses, subject-verb agreement, sentence structure and mistakes/typo.   Firstly, tenses. You should to stick to just one tense depending if you want the story to be told in present or past tense. For present tense, use words such as 'is', 'will', 'has' etc. The hard thing to do is being flexible in your tenses, if you're writing the whole story in present tense, it doesn't mean you write it all with 'is' or 'will' but if you're describing a scene that have already past, it have to been in past tense. (For example: You're telling the story in present tense but you're describing a scene where the characters finished watching a move hence it should be in past tense)   Next, sentence structure. You break one complete too sentence into too many short and incomplete sentences. Try to use make full sure of one full sentence and have the correct sentence structure by reading your story out loud. This could really help because when you write i