Review for LekpopLj // By: Shy_Daydreamer

Title and Story Link:

Title: (8/10)

The connection between the title an the plot are so clear and obvious that the plot was already given away, in other words the title spoiled the story in general. However, it was a really unique title, but please try to think of a title that's still connected to the story's plot, but wouldn't spoil too much of the plot.

Overall appearance: (8/10)

The poster screams that 'supernatural' feeling of the story, along with the dark colored background. However, I really think that black (or some dark shade of grey) and red don't mix well together, making the overall appearance look a little ugly and unpleasant to the eyes. My suggestion is, try to find a background photo/theme that is in the same tone with the poster, that way the colors will blend perfectly and the appearance would look captivating, or look for a color that blends perfectly with red and use that instead.

Also, if ever you're making a note for the readers, like an author's note, please label it, don't use a lot of spaces or a horizontal line to separate it. Also, in that author's note you can write your note for the readers and add the credits (where you credit the designers for your poster or the reviewers who reviewed your story). It looked kind of messy in my eyes, the way that the author's message and the credits used a different font color and was written in bold.

Description and Foreword: (6/10)

After reading the description, I noticed that you're giving out the essential details of your story. Remember, in descriptions and forewords, it's not important to write a lot of words, you just need to write sentences that are short and captivating.

Just a suggestion, to make the description look captivating, use this: "Few words to describe what they have in common: empty, alone, gone, lost'' instead because it should be phrase first before 'empty, alone, gone, lost'.

What caught my eye was the poem written in the foreword. There, the main characters' connections were told: how Iljae was helped by Sehun and how Sehun turns into a ghost in the morning. Also, the definition of the characters were giving out too much information; try to write it short and simple, since their story will be unveiled later on in the story.

I can't help but notice that there were errors in your description and foreword, for example:

DESCRIPTION:

- Both tried to unlock the past, and both failed. However, one cannot succeed in finding a light without finding its light.

(Both tried to unlock the past but failed. It's because one cannot succeed in finding a light without knowing the source of the light.)

Explanation: It was confusing and it didn't make sense.

- Will all unanswered questions be finally answered? Can the light still shine its way on them?

(Will they finally be able to find answers for their questions? Will the light still shine on them?)

FOREWORD:

GO ILJAE:

- She lives alone in a cabin near the forest eversince she was a toddler. She grew up with no parents.

(She lives alone in a cabin near the forest ever since she was a toddler. She grew up without her parents.)

OH SEHUN:

- Lives with his Suho hyung in the West Village.

(Lives with his hyung, Suho, in the West Village.)

- He loves to irritate his Suho hyung, but usually ends up irritating himself.

(He loves to irritate his hyung, but usually ends up irritating himself

or

He loves to irritate Suho, but usually ends up irritating himself.)

Explanation: I didn't quite understand what does 'ends up irritating himself' means.

- He can act manly the second and next, a kid.

(He can be manly but childish as well.)

Plot: (13/20) 

The plot was really amazing. I've never read anything like this, although ghost-themed stories are really abundant these days. I love how you created a main character who's a human at night and a ghost at day, and how both of the main characters are on a quest to get their memories back. Since the story's not yet finished, I expect to find the rest of the chapters to be amazing and memorable, since the first six chapters were captivating. It is a good and unique story, but most of it is unrealistic and, to be honest, it's like a dream that'