Review for myseunghoho // Reviewed by: michiusa

Title and Story link:

Everyone longs for true love (Completed, reviewed with 20 chapters)

Title: (7/10)

Overall the title is very simple, it gives the reader a clear understanding the story has something to do with maybe finding or longing for a true love. However it's not as interesting as the plot you created. And you lacked the missing piece that really tied in the story with the title together. The title should be capitalized liked this: Everyone Longs for True Love.

I'm iffy on the idea of your sub-titles. I think you wanted to this to help you express to who was who but it wasn't as tied into the story as I would've liked.

Overall Appearance: (6/10)

There are a lot of inconsistencies in your text, I wasn't sure if you were trying to express something or maybe you were experimenting with the text?. The best way is just sticking to one font and size throughout the story. Since you spent the time to pick out a song for each chapter, I think you should have sometime finding a poster or maybe just a background that would set up more of an angst mood.

Description and Foreword: (8/10)

I somewhat like your description. Parts of it really drew me in about the two characters' lives being entwined together without them knowing. But with the mentioning of moving through the stages breakup and love, I felt you were revealing too much of the story. And I'm not sure of how accurate the idea of them without knowing is true because Megan seemed to be very aware of how entangled she was with Seungho and stepping into their relationship.

I really liked the poem you provided of how love makes a person feel. It's all very true and realistic. One thing I would like to point out is reword the line:

But though you hate him, thought you love him. 

I wasn't quite sure what you meant 

Plot: (16/20)

Your plot was great, it was unique in the fact that Megan was the back stabbing friend yet Kelly had no idea even to the end. And like karma Megan's love gets stolen by the one person she stole him from. In the first chapter when you mentioned that he wanted to see other people for a moment I thought maybe this was one of those rated XX where they liked trading girlfriends or something but nope, you did a really good job by keeping the surprise until the very end. And I loved the fact how with Megan you talked of present time but with Kelly it was more of the past times they've shared together.

I do however question your technique. The fact that you kept them nameless for quite a long time made the story really confusing, especially since everything is written in the first pov. It took me 15 chapters before I could fully understand what format you were going with. One thing I think would've helped your story easier to understand is have two different fronts. For Megan have a very sharp and bold font and for Kelly maybe something more elegant and passive as to expressive both of their personalities and allow people to understand this is from two very different people's views. Or better yet I think just using their names would have created more of an impact. Although you do loss the sense of mystery but you gain the fact there is less confusion of what's going on.

Language: (18/20)

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