Review for thecafewriter       Title and Story Link:   The Siren's Cry (Ongoing, reviewed with 16 chapters)       Title: (8/10)   The title was very good! I was extremely impress because you avoid words such as 'mermaid', 'love', 'prince' and 'sea' because that would not be as original and might even turn readers away. Instead, you came up with a title that is related to YOUR own story and it was interesting. I love the word 'Siren' in it because it's related to Jinyu where she is the 'siren' in her family hence it relates well to the story. Well, I didn't quite agree with 'cry' here though because up till now, it didn't make a lot of sense. Still, a great and well thought of!  (How relieve I was to know that you change the title because 'Goldfish Girl' didn't sound as unique and intersting as 'The Siren's Cry'!)       Poster: (8/10)   The poster was good in many ways, it was pleasing to the eyes, have all of the main characters in it and the background picture relates to the story theme as well. The only thing I didn't quite like was the positioning of the main characters. I felt that since, so far, we still don't know who will Jinyu choose between Luhan or Yixing, I felt that Yixing should be beside the girl in the poster just like Luhan or this might mislead readers that Yixing plays a bigger role in the story. To me, I felt both Luhan and Yixing have equally big roles in the story and hence the size of their picture should try to be the same. By doing so, it will look much tidier and balance too :)           Description and Foreword: (18/20)   The description was perfect! I love everything about it, from describing the earthquake and a little introduction to the story and especially the part about foam at the end! There wasn't anything else to make it better in opinion so good job for the description! Sadly, I couldn't say the same for the foreword because simply I felt that it's too long winded. When I read it through the first time, I was so excited to read it that when I reach the foreword I honestly, skip after the first few sentence because it's too long. Admittedly, the foreword was also well-written but you could either try to shorten it by summarize the main points or re-write a short foreword/excerpt instead since it's similar to chapter 1-2.       Storyline/Plot: (18/20)    I was so ready to be disappointed by the plot because you've said in the foreword/description page that it's similar to the world renown fairytale - 'The Little Mermaid'. However, instead I find myself awfully addicted to the storyline because you make the story into your own! Although as times, it reminds me of the movie 'Aquamarine' (don't know if you watch it yet but it's a great movie!) for some parts but other than that I didn't remember hearing/watching anything about how a mermaid transform from a mermaid tail to human legs by the scalp and shell coming off! I'm really relieve that you did make the story yours by adding a few of information that you didn't copy from anything and hopefully for the ending or more complications, it will become even more original.