Review: When You Look Me In The Eyes     Review for Babyatheart       Title and Story link:    When You Look Me In The Eyes (Completed one-shot)       Title:   Great title even though I felt that it was slightly too long. Still, the meaning of the story was well translated to the title.        Poster:    -There wasn't any poster or background picture-           Description and Foreword:    The page was organised and clean however the description wasn't grammatically correct and it was to long winded. Sumarise them and correct the sentences. For example:   1. Ae cha didn't always have an easy life. However, she never minded. She hide her secrets from most of the world. But, there was one person that couldn't help but notice her situation.    -Ae cha has never lead an easy life but she never minded her plight. Instead, she would hide all of her secrets from the world but there's a person who couldn't help but notice her. etc               Storyline/Plot:   The plot was simple and to the point. It was a plot about the miserable and torturous life that Ae Cha is suffering from and Yongguk notices her. It was interesting and since it was a one-shot, I couldn't ask for more complications and problem to rise from the story but if you could add more extreme complications, it could make into a better story.        You should also emphasis on most scene when Ae Cha father turned abusive. It was slightly weird to see the father changes his personality in a split second. For example, he was banging on the door furious and later when he got in, he stop and became caring.        Lastly, some parts of was quite confusing for me. I don't understand who and why is the father hurting a woman wh