Review for soph688 // Reviewed by: taid96

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What It Means To Be Free (Completed, one-shot)

Title: (6/10)

I’m sure it was difficult to find a suitable title for the story but the title gave the readers an idea of how the story would be like. It was the best title I could think of after reading the story because the title says it all. However, I don't think it would be able grab reader's attention. If I were looking for a story, I would scroll past this story because the title is a little cliche. It's bad cause a potentially good story is being looked over because the title isn't that attractive. Let me reind you again, this is just my opinion though because I usually judge a story based on the title first, I don't know about the other readers. 

Overall Appearance: (8/10)

There is no particular poster but the picture you used on your foreword, I assume it belongs to Luhan and Sehun is good. It gives the feeling of commitment and strength of two lovers, it gives your title a little more power because, your title says ‘What It Means To Be Free’ but the picture is a contrast of it, commitment is a contrast of being free in my opinion. To put it in a simpler manner is that, it’s interesting. However, I think it would be even more interesting if there is a simple poster or a banner for the story, maybe not on the foreword but on the chapter of the story. I don’t have anything to complain about the font and its size, it was readable and neat. I absolutely love the spacing between each statement; there was this curiosity that builds me up somehow. I also would like to compliment the paragraphing of the story. The story events are separated into different paragraphs and usually I found authors to separate it in a way that readers could not see the time lapse on the story events. Thus, the three little diamonds you place right before each paragraph shows a division of certain story events. The time lapse was seen more clearly and I wasn’t a little bit confused about it. Good job on keeping the flow of the story smooth with the paragraphing

Description and Foreword: (10/10)

I was intrigued by the description and foreword. It’s definitely eye catching and it I was eager to know more of the story. There is simply nothing to say but a compliment. No mistakes on the grammar and spelling. Amazing job!

Plot: (18/20)

This is one of the most amazing one shot I have read. It’s so deep and it makes reading so much more interesting. I think that readers would be able to think and dug in a little deeper towards the meaning of the story. At first, I thought this was going to be another ‘Bonnie and Clyde’ type of story because the story involves robbery, guns and murder but as the story flows, it was so much more meaningful. I admire how you can construct a nonlinear plot in a way that it doesn’t confuse me and the ending that brought all of it together was delivered well. This was definitely a unique plot, the story events was simple and although when you read it at first it seems insignificant, it actually becomes a very satisfying tinge of bits and pieces of Sehun and Luhan. It shows how they act around each other and the way they feel about each other is written so meaningfully. Here comes my favourite part, the plot twist! I had mixed feelings about the ending; it’s not something bad though. It felt great to know that Sehun realises what best for both of them and he decided that he should end what is wrong. The of the story where Luhan, Sehun and the “boy with the eyes of Luhan but not Luhan” gives me this chills (it was exaggerated but I hope you understand that I was nervous) that I honestly felt like he was going to kill the poor kid. The love that Sehun felt for Luhan was so strong that I thought he would anything