Review for flamzfox {Second Review}       Title and Story Link:   Carded Destiny (Ongoing, reviewed with 12 chapters)       Title: (8/10)   The title was intriguing and interesting! It was very well-planned and thought of about the card and a destiny. Sometimes the 'card' in the title wasn't emphasis enough in the story but at least it's a card that was given to Kris in the cafe so I think it's acceptable.       Poster: (9/10)   I love the poster! From the colour, the background picture, how pleasing it is and the quote in the poster! The background picture was perfectly edited and it look very put together and neat! One mark was deducted because of the title being hidden at times. It's crucial for the title to be shown at all times(just like the quote) and it needs to stand out.       Description and Foreword: (18/20)   I was quite disappointed with the description because it's where people could get a glimpse of your story before clicking to open the story and it wasn't as good as the title or the plot! The foreword was alright and it gives off a mysterious feeling so good job for that!       Storyline/Plot: (19/20)    The plot and storyline is much more happening and constant when I compare it with 'Tao and His Eleven' because this time, there was a problem, a complication, dynamic in the story, and solid characters! Thankfully, this time, there wasn't as much characters so it's easier for you to write them and I love how every character here is different. A side note is that chapter 1 is a rather strange chapter. I know it's suppose to emphasis how perfect and good Kris is but because it was told in his point of view, it sounded strange and more towards self obsessive instead! (A little creepy) You could try to write it in the author point of view for this kind of chapter so it will bring out genuine description and it won't sounded too obsessive or creepy.       Language: (17/20)   Overall, you are strong in language where you don't have major problems to work on but just sometimes the sentence didn't make a lot of sense or it could be better phrase.    For example:   1. “Be careful Kris.” Chae Eun lea