Review for LISHlian // By: nanaji

Title and Story Link:

Nemesis of the Sky Descendants (On-going, reviewed with 5 chapters)

Title: (9/10)

Okay, let's give you a round of applause for an awesome title. It really suits your fantasy/supernatural theme. It's a unique title too, rarely common if you ask me. I honestly like it how you manage to link in the storyline to the title since some authors have difficulty to find a title that suits their whole story, this includes me too. The originality of the title is way beyond which explains the high score and I highly think that readers would be attracted to it since it makes the readers wonder what's the story behind it. Even non-fantasy/non-supernatural readers would click it to know what it's about.

Overall appearance: (8/10)

As you know, I highly stress on appearance... So, seeing that you aim for fantasy, your poster is simply wonderful! There is a vibe of imagination, dreams and fantasies all in one in your poster which really gives out an impact for your story. I didn't have any problem reading your story, the font choice and size was perfectly fine. It wasn't hard to read and I simply loved my whole read. Though, need I remind you that readers with slow Internet connection might have a problem reading since it might lag while the page loads your whole layout and sorts but nonetheless, everything's good.

Description and Foreword: (9/10)

Okay, so, you had managed to write the short synopsis without giving out any spoilers to the storyline and I like the fact how it is short yet full of meanings. It made me wonder about almost everything of the story. However, there is one thing I want to point out.

 I KNEW I WAS DIFFERENT, I DIDN'T BELONG. MY WORLD WAS SEALED AWAY AND MY FATE WAS DECIDED. DEEP INSIDE ME LIVES A TORMENTED HEART.

Suggestion: I knew I was different, I knew I didn't belong here. My world was sealed and my fate had been decided. Deep inside of me lies a tormented heart.

 THIS IS THE LOVE STORY BETWEEN A FALLEN DESCENDANT AND ASCENDANT WHO GAVE UP HIS EVERYTHING IN SEARCH FOR HIS BELOVED.

Correction: This is a love story between a fallen descendant and ascendant who gave up his everything in search for his lover.

THIS LOVE WHICH IS SEEMINGLY TRAGIC AMD DREADFULLY DARK.

Correction:  This love, seemingly tragic and dreadfully dark.

Other than that, I see no problem seeing that your description and foreword is neatly organized and isn't messy to read.

Plot: (18/20)

I really like your plot. It seems fresh and have this unique feeling everytime I read a chapter. I don't really know what was your inspiration but in my head I was like thinking EXO's Mama introduction about the tree and blah blah blah. But then I think it was because I had a bucket of EXO feels while I was reading so I had made that stupid conclusion. I can't really comment much on the plot since it's recently started and you're only unveiling their past one by one which probably makes other readers including me curious of almost everything and can't wait to know what's going to happen. I really do wonder what happens next and the history of Kai and then Princess Soojung and all~ I really wonder how the story will turn out.

Language: (18/20)

Prologue:

I truly felt that everything in my life was somehow, all linked to that sky...

Correction: I truly felt that everything in my life somehow was linked to that sky...

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