Review for Hope3698  // By: caffeine_kiss

Title and Story Link:

Standing Alone (Completed One-shot)

Title: (6/10)

When I first read the title, I had the feeling that it would be about N being alone, but throughout the whole story, Leo (Taekwoon) was actually with him, so I can't really consider that N was 'standing alone' the whole entire time, and to be honest the title did not catch my attention at all. It would be good if you could change it to a title that is much more unique, maybe something about helping or being together. 

Overall appearance: (3/10)

The overall appearance of your story would be the weakest link out of all the components. The paragraphings for the story itself is just right, but I think the problem would be the 'foreword' page as I find it really messy.

If I were a reader who just came across your story, I think I'll most likely pass it as your questions in the description do not stand out at all. You could first start by changing the font and the size of the questions, this would help catch readers attention and so when readers click on the page, the description is what catches their attenetion first. Secondly, you could put each question in a separate paragraph each. This helps distinguish one question from another. 

For the disclamier that you want to write, you could put your username with the story and the copyright sign next to it.

Eg...   Hope3698; Standing Alone 2013  ©

something along that line would be ideal for a disclaimer. At the bottom you could put that the storyline belongs to you and like you don't own the pictures of gifs.

Lastly, I hope that you can at least put a background for the story so that it would not look too plain and it would be much pleasant to look at. If you have time it would be the best if you request for a poster as well.

Description and Foreword: (5/10)

The description was really disappointing, I honestly expected more like maybe some quotes from the story. I'm not exactly sure but I felt as though there was something big missing in the description, and I think that it would be good if you had add more as there was too little information about the story in it. 

I found a tiny error in the foreword too...

"I as descriptions, so maybe you shouldn't put too much hope on it?"

(I at descriptions, so maybe you shouldn't put too much hope on it?)

Also as mentioned in the overall appearance section, I have touched on how to change the disclaimer so it would be good if you change it.

Plot: (16/20)

The plot was original, and that was what pulled your score up. Unfortunately, as I was reading your story, I find that there is no twist or turns in the story, which made me feel a little disappointed as I was hoping for at least a slight twist in the storyline. I could almost predict what happened next in almost every part of the story. 

As the story is lacking a huge , my suggestion would be to create a big twist in the story, I'm not sure whether you are willing to change the story, but in order to make it more exciting. For example, you could have written that Hakyeon (N) had injured his back really bad and he wasn't allowed to perform, let alone practice dancing, thus he felt alone. This would be able to go with the title as you could mention that he felt as if he was standing alone since no one understood how he felt. This is of course just a suggestion if you have any interesting ideas that you thnk would fit the story, you could change it too.