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Review: Hidden Blushes     Review for Cutie-Pie       Title and Story link:    Hidden Blushes (Completed one-shot)       Title: (9/10)   Great title and it was memorable! Hidden Blushes was the highlight of the whole story and suits well for the story! :))       Poster: (-/10)   -There wasn't any poster-           Description and Foreword: (18/20)   The page was organized and neat. The description was describe well and you reveal just enough to make readers curious, good! The foreword was done well too!           Storyline/Plot: (17/20)   The plot was original and hence it's a one-shot, nothing much could be critised but it would be better if the story could have more events or make it more happenings.        Characters: (8/10)   The characters was lacking and vague but it's a one-shot so it's fine. Still, by add more characteristic to the main characters will make the readers feel as though they know characters well- making the story alive.       Language: (18/20)   The words you choose is good! Everything including punctuation and capitalization was perfect.  It was surprising that I could only so far find one mistake:   1. Lifting the covers, Himchan slipped out of bed, quietly walking over to Youngguk and sitting on the edge of the bed and tapping his thigh for his to move.   - Himchan lift the covers and slipped out of bed while quietly walking over to Youngguk. He
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babyblueunicorn
#1
Chapter 179: Saw it now, I am so sorry for all the misspelling and all... That specific story was written before I had any experience here.... LOL

Yes, I would love to help you with your Spanish homework.
Claro, me encantaría ayudate con tu tarea de español cuando la escuela empiece. ¿De dónde eres? ¿En qué grado estas? ¡Háblame por mensaje privado!
hermeh #2
read my fic? :)