Review for designer101

 

Title and Story Link:

My Sketchbook is Alive (Ongoing, reviewed with 6 chapters)

 

 

Title: (10/10)

The title relates to the storyline and it was always interesting and special as well! I would definitely want to know more about the story if I happen to chance upon this story! Great title!

 

 

Overall Appearance: (7/10)

I love the simple layout you're currently having but I have to be honest here, I don't like the poster at all. The poster wasn't good enough - the blending and shading of the main characters was poorly done and the title didn't stood out, overall the poster look too concentrated with red. I would recommend to request for a poster in a graphic store to get a better poster :)

 

 

Description and Foreword: (8/10)

The whole page was well-written with the description being straight to the point and concisely written. I dread description/foreword that is too wordy or too many abundance sentences use but yours was just short and simple, good. For the foreword, I'm glad that you have a short introductory of the main character's here to give readers a brief information of the characters as your story could get quite confusing at times. However, I would recommend you to shorten each character's description here, just describe the more important ones and summarise the rest. Just one part where I feel that the sentence could be better written :

-They knew they had to stop him.

(They knew that they had to stop him.)

 

 

Plot: (19/20) 

You've scored full marks for originality as I've never read a story with the sketchbook being cursed/alive. Though I've watch a movie before with a similar plot before but I've never read one like it. The storyline was definitely interesting and engaging. It's unique and memorable, I remember dreaming it after finish reading it. However, just one small mistake is that the plot is quite confusing. From chapter 1, about the little girl who is hearing voices, you should confirm the character/name of the girl, be it it's Kyungmi or other girl, reveal her name at some point to avoid confusion that you're describing another different girl. Other than that, I feel that the part about Daehyun's family was quite confusing. Who's sister? Who's bunny ears? But since you're only in your 6th chapter, yo