Review for BuiscuitTeacher // Reviewed by: pilsuk123

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Exotic EXO Poetic Dialogues [Christmas Special] (Completed story with 6 chapters)

Title:

The title was a bundle of words all together which doesn't really make up a good title. It's too long and it could've been a better title when it's shorter. Perhaps cancel out exotic or exo and the rest is fine. You added in the main elements of your story in the title which makes up of poetry dialogues and it's a christmas special version. However, overall, it's a acceptable title but could be better if it's shorter and if it sounded more interesting. You don't have to tell the readers what the story exactly is from the title because you can do so in the foreword/description, instead you can make it more interesting and special without directly telling it. For eg. An exotic christmas eve or something like that.

Overall Appearance:

Purrrrrfect! The page was so beautifully made with the amazing posters and decorations, it definitely made the whole christmas vibe! Every single poster in the d/f is such a wonderful and perfect one, can't help staring and admiring them. The layout was simple and organized and the f/d page is neat as well. You would've have scored a complete full marks if this is a graded reviewer for the overall appearance part.

Description and Foreword:

There isn't actually a description in the story which is quite disappointing because if I'm a reader and clicked on the story, I would really be interested at what the story is about from the description. Instead, the description of the story is more of a foreword because it's where it usually consists of author's notes and inspiration etc. You can write a short summary of the story in the description to help readers know what they're about to read and experience. 

Plot:

Chapter 1:

For chapter 1, this is the chapter where you used chinese which is really interesting for me because I was just in the mood to read something like this - chinese with english in a story. I wouldn't consider this to be a poem or poetic because it's more focus on the conversation between Tao and Kris. The focus of the chapter was slightly confusing for me because I understand that Tao is asking Kris to go to Britain(?) and he said yes? And suddenly, Tao compliments Kris on his looks but he replied with he doesn't know? I was confuse at that part... But I could say that this is one of the cutest dialogue out of all!

Chapter 2:

AH, this was really cute as well! Chanbaek moment! It feels real because I can feel their playful and close relationship from this dialogue. I can totally imagine them like this and Chanyeol forever disturbing and teasing Chanyeol and Baekhyun forever falling for every tricks he play.

Chapter 3:

Kaisoo <3 This, too, feels really realistic and funny. I can so visualize D.O cooking and baking and Jongin have to come to disturb him and order him around with the flavor of the cake or the icing of the cake!

Chapter 4:

This one made me smile and laugh so much! Chen and Xiumin moment seriously. The last part of got me cracking up so hard when Xiumin throw the ball directly at Chen and he got hit by the ball! Gosh, poor Chen indeed.

Chapter 5:

Aw, over reactive leader is forever a caring leader omg. Suho rushing over to Lay just because he was grumbling he's hungry, no wonder he's astonished! I think Suho is equally as protective and caring to the other members but I always think that he have a special r/s with Lay because he always stick around Suho and follow him around! 

Chapter 6:

This is my favorite among all the 6 dialouges in the story! Both Luhan and Sehun here was portrayed so cutely and real! Luhan always wanting to get beanies and Sehun with the bubble tea addiction. When Sehun said he'll pay for it, I died. I can imagine