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Review: Only Sehun     Review for inspiritlocksmith       Title and Story Link:   Only Sehun (Ongoing, reviewed with 7 chapters)       Title: (5/10)   For the title, I felt that it was struggling in many ways. Firstly, when I type in 'Only Sehun' in the search box, your story didn't appear on the first page, this will make your story extremely hard to be found. Since the definition and the theme about mask appear in description and foreword page (which I felt was really good), maybe you could add to the title to make it easier to be found? Next, I felt that the title didn't really relate to the story because while reading, Luhan was the main character and he appear/talk more in the story so by putting 'Sehun' in the title, it could get a little misleading. Still, it was still a rather interesting and creative title and hence you scored some marks for it.       Poster: (7/10)   I'm sorry, I didn't quite like the poster at all because it's too light and Luhan could barely be seen. If I didn't read the story and just by judging the poster, I could misunderstand the story as Sehun being the leading character here. Another thing was also because of how the title and the quote didn't stand out. If the poster is already in a light tone colour, the title should stand out. (Moreover, the quote was really good, it should stand out more too.) Overall wise, it's still a good poster.       Description and Foreword: (19/20)   The description and foreword page was very well written and it was organize. I love how you add the theme 'mask' into the page by having a definition by it and a quote about it turning into skin! To be honest, I actually love everything you place in this page, from the description to the foreword but the only thing I felt was lacking is the introduction to the characters. I know that if you read long enough, you could catch up about the characters but since you start the story by jumping into the scene where they both met, anything else about the past was barely written. You could add a few short introduction to th
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babyblueunicorn
#1
Chapter 179: Saw it now, I am so sorry for all the misspelling and all... That specific story was written before I had any experience here.... LOL

Yes, I would love to help you with your Spanish homework.
Claro, me encantaría ayudate con tu tarea de español cuando la escuela empiece. ¿De dónde eres? ¿En qué grado estas? ¡Háblame por mensaje privado!
hermeh #2
read my fic? :)