The writing was pretty good, especially since English is not your first language, if I read your author’s note correctly. Your writing and sentence structure do not sound choppy at all. I just had one complaint about the story structure that I mentioned in the flow. The memory flashes come back too suddenly for Krystal, and it seems rushed. There’s a little deux ex machina vibe going on. The same can be said about their kiss following her returning memories. I liked how it wasn’t a “remember him after I kiss him” type scene, but I wish ;) that the scene could have been pushed forward to a later time. Also, the time skip was quite convenient, and I know it was probably done to speed up to the end of the story since you already had 5 epilogues, but I was hoping for maybe a little more extrapolation on the completion of the memory regaining platform. Overall, though, the writing quality was fairly good.