I love your unique title. But if it fits the story, I'm not quite sure. For me personally, when I read your title, I got another idea of what would be happening in the story. Well, good job on suprising your readers with a totally different story. It was not at all what I had in mind or expected of the story to become. Maybe we aren't far enough in the story, to understand yet why you choose that title. It doesn't sound boring and I didn't see that title yet here on AFF. But I still wonder why that choice? I give full marks because it does attracks readers and triggers their attention and curiousity. I would love to hear your explanation on this one.
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DESCRIPTION
You have quite a long description, but than again everything is in there. The reason I wanted to read this story are because of the short summary/description, the characters and the poster. You give your readers a lot of information, but all relevant to the story. As from that moment on, you know what you may an can expect from the story. The information was just enough. I do like the fact you worked with the 2 POV's but than in the 3rd person of the main characters in your description. It gives that something extra to it. The characters are already introduced as well.
FOREWORD
Well, your foreword is like more a thank you note to everyone who helped you out with the graphics and advertising it. Also the usual disclaimer has been mentioned.
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