Your writing is pretty good! other than grammar issues and verb issues, you’ve got a really smooth style that’s easy to follow and a pleasure to read. However, I will say, along a similar line of what I mentioned before in terms of your flow, that you were injecting notes of non-real circumstances into your writing. There were moments where it seemed like I was being shortchanged on descriptions, or where you abbreviated the pathway towards a certain situation in your writing and there was no explanation of how something was happening- for example, when Sehun randomly mentions using an axe to split the head of a rabid dog open- if he’s asking Luhan if he remembers this, then Luhan has to have seen it, but how would this be something to mention lightly when an axe is probably the most gory way to kill a rabid dog? you could use a gun instead. that’s more believable (especially in the context of possible contact with rabies infected animals).

Another example of abbreviated description/ rather unbelievable structure is when you write “I left you and quietly took a sledgehammer from a nearby construction site.” was the construction site mentioned earlier? where did it come from? spatially how far away is this site from the man? how did Sehun catch the man if he had to run over to a construction sight to get a sledgehammer, and how did he manage to swipe a sledgehammer so quickly? see what i’m getting at here? Be a little more exacting in the aspects of your story that you’re throwing in- one shots are unique in that because they are so short, they have to be airtight, and you can’t really throw in a major plot point like that and then not explain it.