B#5 | Hanbi's & Hayi's Year-long Romance | hahahayi

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Title

Author

Characters

Category

Genre

Status

Hanbin & Hayi's Year-long Romance

hahahayi

lee hi, b.i

B*G

slice of life, romance, light angst

Ongoing (7 Chap)

Description

hanbin and hayi's chemistry with each other in one year, where it all starts with an accident.

Title

The title fits well with the summarizing the main theme of the story. Even though Its not overly original it still has relevance with the story.

Descr.&Forew.

The description is a good its short but to the point. Though maybe a little background information on the two main characters wouldn’t hurt, just not to much that it takes away from the development of the story.

Graphics

The poster fits very well with the whole theme and it ties in well to the main characters in the story. It definitely gives a light and airy feel to the story

Char. Dev.

Even though I can get a sense of the characters themselves, it still doesn’t distract that they still seen one-dimensional. This is why a little more of the character’s background is needed at the beginning of the story than getting bits and pieces throughout it. Though I do think that their personalities are well written.

Appearance

The only reason this does not get a perfect score is the fact that it is nearly impossible to read this on anything other than my tablet or computer. It is nice though if readers are reading this on their computers. The font size and spacing of the paragraphs is just right, but the only thing wrong is you seem to have the entire text centered. It is not bad to have the text centered but if readers try to read this on their phones, it’s not going to work.

Orgin.&Plot

I love the way this story reads. The feel of the story is well thought out and told in a way that captures the reader’s attention. Its not an very original plot but its written in a way that keeps readers intrigued. The plot in this seems easy enough to where all this may lead but it enjoyable to see where it does. In other words: I didn’t get bored reading this.

Flow

The flow of the story is not too bad. The progression of the story moves at a pace that does not seem to drag the story along. Each chapter gives of just enough for the story to move forward nicely; and yet, every now again it’s a little confusing where we are in the story. I find myself going back a bit to make sure I haven’t gotten lost anywhere

Writing

You are very good at conveying how the characters act and react to their environment and situation. Your way with words always the reader to feel what the characters themselves and your writing style makes this story a joy to read

Gramm.&Spel.

The grammar written here can use at least one glace over before you update again. The few mistakes in this are, for the most part, small things punctuation or capitalization errors. The larger errors are the jump between past and present tenses, which makes some of your sentence structure a little off in places. I am sure much of that is fixable by simply reading over what you write each time.

Gen.Enjoym.

This is a story I will definitely continue to read to see where it goes. The only thing that does get a bit old is the constant eye rolling. Its getting a little over used in here and takes away from the story one eye roll at a time. I really enjoy the interaction between Hanbin and his sister I think I like her character the best.

Title : 8/10

Description & Foreword: 7/10

Graphics: 10/10

Character Development: 6/10

Appearance : 8/10

Originality & Plot: 7/10

Flow: 7/10

Writing: 7/10

Grammar & Spelling: 6/10

General Enjoyment: 8/10

74 / 100

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fefedove #1 Dec 23, 2015 05:56:43

Chapter 100: Omg I don't even remember having requested this and never credited either. I'm so sorry and I'll do it as soon as I have access to a laptop omgomg