B#5 | Because You're My Apple (And I'm Your Gravity) | neverendingfairy
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Title
Author
Characters
Category
Genre
Status
Because You're My Apple (And I'm Your Gravity)
neverendingfairy
Key, Jonghyun, Taemin, Minho, Onew, Kim Youngmin, EXO
Boy x Boy
Romance, Angst, Action
Completed (7 Chpts)
Description
After the death of his parents, Kim Kibum became "Key", a ruthless mafia gang member, in order to pay his father's debts. One day, he met Kim Jonghyun, a cafe owner and singer who taught him to be Kim Kibum again.
Title
The title fits well with what the audience may think will happen and with what does happen in the story.
Descr.&Forew.
The information given about this story is all that’s needed for readers become interested and willing to read more and with this, you did very well. Your total honesty is appreciated as well.
Graphics
A nice background or even just a poster would be nice to gain a bigger audience for this story. Though I can see that this story doesn’t actually need one how well it’s written, but a little something extra wouldn’t hurt either.
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Char. Dev.
Not a lot of character development in this story in my opinion. The reader does get a chance to see some of the characters in a different light, towards the end, but doesn’t mean they were lacking either. I genuinely felt that each character actually had to different and unique personality and each was well thought out.
Appearance
Orgin.&Plot
Many of the plot turns were a bit, of “I’ve read that before,” but it was written in a way where it still keeps the reader’s attention. I plot got a little too unbelievable towards the end; especially Jonghyun’s situation with his brother. His reasons, though possible, didn’t feel right here even though it was predictable that that particular part of the story would lead that way.
Flow
The flow of this story was very easy to follow. It wasn’t too shot nor was it too choppy and kept the reader’s attention instead of being distracted. The pace isn’t too fast or too slow but seems right for the type of situation the characters find themselves facing.
Writing
Not a lot of strong imagery in this but it’s still good nonetheless. The way the characters interact with one another and their dialogue really places a good visualization in the readers mind.
Gramm.&Spel.
The grammar and spelling here aren’t bad just a few noticeable errors here and there. The biggest problems you have are the comma splices that are everywhere that are creating quite a few run-on sentences.
Gen.Enjoym.
I enjoyed the witty banter in this and I especially enjoyed Jonghuyn’s character.
Title : 8/10
Description & Foreword: 10/10
Graphics: 1/10
Character Development: 5/10
Appearance : 9/10
Originality & Plot: 6/10
Flow: 8/10
Writing: 7/10
Grammar & Spelling: 6/10
General Enjoyment: 7/10
67 / 100
Reviewer: PachesLily
date : 29 / 03 / 2015
CREDITS :
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COMMENTS / Thoughts & REMINDER
Comments & thoughts
I look forward to a sequel to Key and Jonghyun’s journey.
REMINDER
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